TPO60 integrated writing
In the reading and listening passages, the writer believes that rhinos can be protected. Providing three methods which are contradicted by the following lecture.
Firstly, let the wildlife expert ‘dehorn’ rhinos living in the wild, making it less attractive to poachers, while the speaker views this issue from an opposite angle. According to the professor, without rhino horn, it will be difficult to survive in a short period of time, when they find food danger, no attack ability, so the rhino will be more threatened.
Secondly, educate consumers, after testing, most of the ingredients of rhino horn for protein, no nutritional elements, so that consumers reduce the demand for rhino horn. However, the speaker opposes the writer’s opinion by saying that the belief in the health benefits of rhino horn dates back to ancient times, when it was believed to have great healing powers.
Thirdly, get the government to legalize the sale of rhino horn so the government can sell it cheaply and make poachers unprofitable. By the contrast, in accordance with the speaker, the reading passage’ claim does not hold water because Legalizing the trade in rhino horn, which is already illegal, not only adds to the threat to rhinos, because cheap rhino horn leads to increased demand for rhino horn, and when demand increases, so does supply, leading to more rhinos being killed.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 259, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...will be difficult to survive in a short period of time, when they find food danger, no attack ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 22.412803532 40% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1166.0 1373.03311258 85% => OK
No of words: 225.0 270.72406181 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18222222222 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60534682888 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622222222222 0.540411800872 115% => OK
syllable_count: 346.5 419.366225166 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.25165562914 479% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.8268790379 49.2860985944 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.75 110.228320801 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.125 21.698381199 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06452816374 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.3589403974 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 53.8541721854 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.42419426049 116% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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