Nowadays, celebraties are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements and this has let a bad example for young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?
In contemporary settings, filmcity becomes hot topic. Therefore, celebrities become more popular for their charm and wealth rather than for their hard working and achievements. Hence, this shows a negative instance for youngsters. I completely agree with the statement and reasons are discussed in forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin with, there are plethora of reasons which shows that famous personalities have negative impact on the life of young masses. First and foremost reason is that young people make the idol of their life whom they like most. Due to this, they want to become copy of them and do that all wrong and illegal things from which they admire as from their idol. For instance, there are too many movies which are based on criminal sites such as mirzapur movie, which is based on the life of crime. Therefore, there are numerous teenagers who are admire from that movie and do crimes and illegal take by mimic their favourite personality. As a result, this leads to great negative impression on them and their parents life to, because their face embarrassed situations due to their children.
Moreover, the another bad factor of this notion is addiction and consumption of drugs in young age. In this criteria, youngsters follow their like one celebrity and if their favourite once consume drugs in their movies. This becomes negative picture for their followers, these are youngsters and teenagers. They also become addict to drugs and are being make their life hell and their companions to. As a result, they spoil their lives by following their idols who shows wrong picture in front of public for their publicity.
To recapitulate, I personally consider that celebrities show bad impacts on the life of youngsters and teenagers. Because, these once follow their liked personality in every manner such as crime, drug addition and so on.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08169934641 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59953506491 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532679738562 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.1767252344 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.4705882353 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322390281359 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111070174586 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826290119153 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202922939393 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.095822891444 0.056905535591 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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