Nowadays, families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to this. Why is this happening? Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?
Along with the era of modernization and integration, people gradually become accustomed to the hustle and bustle of their life as well as their dependency on technologies, which have so much to do with the reason why families are not as close as in the past. Furthermore, whereas it is argued that this problem might bring us advantages that will open another chapter in human history, I strongly believe that its drawbacks outweigh its merits and will negatively influence our future.
The addiction to modern devices and youngsters’ busier lifestyles give rise to the distance among family members. In recent years, more and more state-of-the-art technology has emerged and given birth to the penchant for being glued to the so-called most fascinating devices there are. In the meantime, the bustling lifestyles of the young also negatively influence the atmosphere within each family. Cutting down on their time for family, young people are inclined to spend more time working and pursuing their personal advantages, namely both material and spiritual advantages. To illustrate, youngsters attempt to get promoted, hence, receive higher salaries which can meet all of their personal satisfaction. Particularly, there has been a survey showing that in most megacities, the young and elderly stated that they spend most of their time keeping up with the pace of life rather than socializing with their beloved family members. Worse, their family reunions scarcely occur.
This ongoing trend comes along with both advantages and disadvantages. However, it is believed that its shortcomings have the edge over its merits. To begin with, it would be a loss if we did not acknowledge the benefits, which are that everyone would be more likely to acquire more accomplishments on their path to success. What is more, they will manage to chase their own passions. On the other hand, when it comes to drawbacks, ruining family happiness would be mentioned in the first place. Following this outcome, family members will unquestionably lack mutual understanding. The less fragile this connection is, the fewer thoughts among family members are shared with each other. Accordingly, the children will commit crimes easily because of lacking parents’ instructions and orientation. What is more, when parents do not fully understand their children, it will bring out many irreconcilable debates. Far more serious are many mental problems, such as depression, anxiety disorders, and mood disorders. To give an example, there are many cases in which children commit suicide after having had many disputes with their parents. The rationale of these decisions is that they feel as though they are not fully comprehended, and therefore deduced that their parents are trying to control their lives excessively.
Pursuing personal advantages is everyone’s privilege. However, it is our duty that we need to balance work and family to avoid family misunderstandings, which have a direct impact on each individual’s development in society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1320, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing to control their lives excessively. Pursuing personal advantages is everyone...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, therefore, well, whereas, such as, as well as, to begin with, what is more, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 49.0 24.0651302605 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2557.0 1615.20841683 158% => OK
No of words: 475.0 315.596192385 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38315789474 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95662006624 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 176.041082164 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564210526316 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 790.2 506.74238477 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0917412479 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.173913043 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.652173913 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.65217391304 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171924431108 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488166535402 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061040499628 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118851293027 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0773065142902 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 78.4519038076 185% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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