What distinguishes young people from their parents' or grandparents' generation is a lack of physical exercise. Today's generation are spending far too long playing computer games, chatting aimlessly on social networking sites or simply watching TV, and too little time being active.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I agree that playing games, browsing social media, or watching TV are activities that distinguish between Y generation and Baby Boomer. Since those activities could produce people becomes addicted and lazy.
Nowadays, youngster have a tendency to play video games a lot, since it is very popular and accessible. Children often takes almost 20 hours for playing games, and it could provide them abandoning their duties from school. Compared to baby boomer generation, people tends to do activities in outside area. For children they often to play around in the field with their friends, while for adult they used to playing soccer and baseball, because there is nothing to do in their homes. Putting more simply, active outdoor activities was really popular in older generation but different in this era. For example, in Korean Drama namely “Squid Game”, all popular children games such as hide and seek and soccer in middle of the rain were playing by children and youngster.
In addition, playing games and watching TV creates people to become lazy. Due to, they do not have to move their bodies for having fun. Put it to simply, people just need a mobile phone or TV to enjoy their live, therefore they have no time to enjoy outdoor activities such as playing soccer or baseball. Compared to older generation, youngster usually did activity out of doors, since they were think it was not cozy to stay at home because there were not entertainment tools such as TV or Video Games. For example, in Jakarta, the Capital City of Indonesia, children often to return to their home after school just to play video games or watching cartoon movies.
In conclusion, watching TV or playing video games are activities in millennium era making youngster to reduce physical activities and it could provide people becomes addicted and lazy. Where possible, parents should have makes a rule for their children limiting their home activities and play outside.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 397, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'thought'.
Suggestion: thought
... activity out of doors, since they were think it was not cozy to stay at home because...
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Line 7, column 303, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...their home activities and play outside.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04938271605 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46956014872 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512345679012 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.221362359 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.066666667 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176766224372 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746537938059 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506581605288 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133445776959 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184322968867 0.056905535591 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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