Some say that because many people are living much longer , the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably .
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Currently, people have longer life expansion than in the past. For this reason, they should be occupied with their profession instead of becoming retired in early age. I totally disagree with this statement, as peoples` abilities may be weaker in older age rather than their previous times as well as it can result in growing unemployment rate among young generations.
To start with, the majority number of elderly peoples` work productivity might be less, because of certain ailments in their age. The old could have obstacles in terms of acquiring new skills, due to having poor memory and copying the latest techniques in their workplace during this period of their life. For instance, if they want to remember new information, which might be related to their work regulations, they may have to allocate more time for it than youths. Apart from this, young employees are open -minded ,thus they may try to use new methods and technologies for their workplace in order to increase efficiency of their work. Yet, the elders may have regular hedache and stress, it can lead to lose their desire to work .Therefore, they just prefer staying at the same schedule without some changes.
Furthermore, when peoples` working years become longer than the present, young people may challenge regarding finding a job. Many organisations might have already enough old staff, so only few of them may offer a job to youths. After this, most of them may solely rely on their parents salary for family budget and residing independently might be more difficult than they expected. Thus, people ought to unwind in the rest of their life after academic years, as in this case it would be decent for their generations.
By way of conclusion, individuals should be retired in the current fixed time for the sake of avoiding some issues in for their work organisations and providing promising future for their heirs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, apart from, for instance, as well as, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06309148265 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6817516918 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583596214511 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0446565755 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.461538462 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3846153846 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176841685156 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789869551825 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490643733579 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122987253059 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298008847142 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.