The country must ensure that their major cities financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: it is primarily in cities that the nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Even the claim itself is convincing and reasonable because greater city usually require more funds to thrive, its reason is provincial. Sometimes major cities are ensured to be given large amount of fiscal support not due to its cultural advantage, but due to its development potential and extant population and local facility scale.
But I cannot wipe out the possibility that some big cities are given money for their cultural advantage. For example, some cities in China, where is one of the origins of Asia Culture, are protected well by providing enough funds. Xian, having the richest history in China, contains a plethora of relics in Chinese history, and it had become the capital city for over ten dynasty over the past two thousand years. However, given its location in the mid of China, its strategic value deteriorates a lot in modern society, so normally speaking it should have poor economic performance like cities around it as Gansu or Ningxia, but it turns out to be economic core in the mid-China. I believe the reason is its rich history, which is consistent with China's government's policy protecting traditional culture and building up cultural confidence. Thus, assigning more fiscal support to it could result from its cultural value.
However, rich history being the primary rationale for a city's financial support is not common, city like Xi An is anomalous. Multiple reasons could explain why countries must assign financial support to their big cities. In mid-eastern countries, they regard their major city as the impression of their whole country, then lend untold support to those cities on buildings, traffic systems and domestical facilities. And for city like New York City, a city contains the densest population in the world, received the highest support from federal government, but what history value could be found on it? I acknowledge that the NYC held relative rich history compared to America, since it was founded in 17C by immigrations, but the tradition culture is a very tiny factor affecting its fiscal support comparing with its financial potential. And even in city having both history and financial potential, the role of tradition culture preservation is still minuscule. Accordingly, history of city does play a role in influencing a country's decision on financial support, but we cannot conclude that into the only and vital one.
In sum, although the claim shows reasonableness, its underlying reason is too narrow. History factor is one of the factors explaining why country should assign fiscal support to major cities, but when compare to other reasons like economic potentials and the need of improve people's lives, it becomes extraneous.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 373, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'dynasty' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'dynasties'.
Suggestion: dynasties
...ad become the capital city for over ten dynasty over the past two thousand years. Howev...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, however, so, still, then, thus, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2270.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 436.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20642201835 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72465480247 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552752293578 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 723.6 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.77640449438 563% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.590979461 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.529411765 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6470588235 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94117647059 5.21951772744 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36491994567 0.243740707755 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123540918059 0.0831039109588 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621134037504 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207931831825 0.150359130593 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0982912674209 0.0667264976115 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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