The following appeared in a letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper. "In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend—the city-run public schools—comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority they give to public education. For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms, Parson City has recently spent almost twice as much per year as Blue City has for its public schools—even though both cities have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of the above given argument holds the view that various cities of the region of Treehaven differ in the value they place on public education. The author supports his stand by saying that the amount of money spent by parson city on its schools is two times that spent by blue city despite having about the same population that pays taxes. therefore, according to the author, parson city residents value public education more than blue city residents. However, the author seems to be looking at the issue within a narrow scope. Instead of making conclusions with the little data that he has, the author should try to find out more facts to support his argument. As mentioned, the facts that the author presents to support his argument are not sufficient to form conclusions and decide about the importance a region places on education.
First of all, what can be said for one city may not be true for other cities. Each city spends its share of taxes on different services. this cannot be compared because the needs of each city differ from another. While one of the cities can spend more on public education, another city might have another major issue that needs to be attended. For example, if a city is fighting with a problem of a high death rate or infant mortality rate due to lack of health care services, it is more important to spend the government money on building hospitals and dispensaries. this city will have to spend on creating awareness about health care and bringing up the survival rate amongst its residents. For such a city, it becomes necessary to spend on another issue that demands more attention. this does not mean that it attaches less importance to public education. The residents may place the same importance to education as other cities, but the city is not able to spend on its schools due to another issue of greater concern.
Further, it can be said that such a comparison is a baseless comparison due to the fact that the total amount of taxes collected not only depend upon the number of residents but also on the composition of residents. if parson city can budget more funds for public education it is likely that the residents are shelling out more taxes despite the same number of residents as blue city. The amount of tax a person pays depends upon his income. The higher the income, the more will be the tax. therefore, it is likely that parson city residents are richer and the average income is more than that of blue city. this could be the reason that it can shell out more taxes, which eventually means that more amounts can be spent on public schools. The decision about spending the taxes collected on public services is that of the administration.
therefore, it has to look into all the places that need funds. it is possible that the condition of schools differ in different places due to which public schools in one city need more attention than those in other cities. if blue city is spending lesser as compared to parson city on education, it is possible that the public schools in blue city are already of a higher level than those of parson city. On the other hand, if parson city is spending more on its public schools, it is possible that this is done because these schools are backward and need funds for basic things to bring them up. The discussion given above weakens the argument presented by the author. it only proves that the author forms his opinion in a hurry by just looking at the few facts that he has. he should rather have a broader outlook and not jump to such conclusions that can be contradicted.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 637 350
No. of Characters: 2897 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.024 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.548 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.3 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 194 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35.389 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.152 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.547 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore
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Suggestion: This
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Suggestion: This
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Suggestion: This
...ther issue that demands more attention. this does not mean that it attaches less imp...
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Suggestion: If
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Suggestion: If
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 13.6137724551 191% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 28.8173652695 205% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 55.5748502994 164% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2949.0 2260.96107784 130% => OK
No of words: 637.0 441.139720559 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6295133438 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02382911018 4.56307096286 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3909747026 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 204.123752495 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.38147566719 0.468620217663 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 935.1 705.55239521 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1285387019 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.689655172 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9655172414 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96551724138 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 5.15768463074 19% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271575913638 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847188296179 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770377681387 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271575913638 0.128457276422 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 12.5979740519 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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