The bar chart below shows the percentage of men and women aged 60 64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000.

The chart illustrates the proportion of males and females aged 60-64 who were working in the year 1970 and 2000 in USA, Belgium, Japan and Indonesia.

Overall, the proportion of men and women of age 60-64 were doing jobs decreased in 2000 in comparison of 1970. Inspite this, the percent of men employed in USA remains relatively similar in both years. While, the number of females employed in Belgium decreased drastically in the year 2000.

With regards 1970, the proportion of the men dominates over the period in four nations then women. Percentage of women did not exceed around 78 in all the countries. The females employed in Belgium and Indonesia were relatively similar. It is comprised as nearly 65%. In USA the most significant employees are male accounted as about 90%. While, the least employers in Japan are women accounted as 56% only.

In the respective year 2000, the people of Belgium were less significant country employed as only 52% and 8% respectively. Despite this, the females remain same employed in the three countries and namely USA common Japan and Indonesia. However, the man of USA and Indonesia shows highest employee rate in respect of all countries through out the year.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mains relatively similar in both years. While, the number of females employed in Belg...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 275, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'shows the highest'.
Suggestion: shows the highest
.... However, the man of USA and Indonesia shows highest employee rate in respect of all countri...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 331, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...ployee rate in respect of all countries through out the year.
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1011.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 202.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00495049505 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61980366404 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 106.607317073 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539603960396 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 300.6 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.33902439024 230% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.7645593632 43.030603864 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.7692307692 112.824112599 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5384615385 22.9334400587 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.15384615385 5.23603664747 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378823838159 0.215688989381 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121680635838 0.103423049105 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0990562207658 0.0843802449381 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237656634997 0.15604864568 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063106393123 0.0819641961636 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.2329268293 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.3012195122 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mains relatively similar in both years. While, the number of females employed in Belg...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 275, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'shows the highest'.
Suggestion: shows the highest
.... However, the man of USA and Indonesia shows highest employee rate in respect of all countri...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 331, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...ployee rate in respect of all countries through out the year.
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1011.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 202.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00495049505 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61980366404 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 106.607317073 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539603960396 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 300.6 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.33902439024 230% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.7645593632 43.030603864 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.7692307692 112.824112599 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5384615385 22.9334400587 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.15384615385 5.23603664747 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378823838159 0.215688989381 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121680635838 0.103423049105 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0990562207658 0.0843802449381 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237656634997 0.15604864568 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063106393123 0.0819641961636 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.2329268293 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.3012195122 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.