Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others believe that zoos are useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both points of views and give your opinion.
These days, various animals are on the verge of extinction, so governments and inhabitants should take more actions to deal with this problem. Although many argue that keeping animals in zoos is the best way to protect fauna, I still believe that zoos are immoral.
On the one hand, various reasons explain the positive aspects of holding animals in zoos. The first reason is that endangered animals provide a safer environment when living in zoos or wildlife parks. For instance, they can live far away from the hunter and poachers who try to do illegal activities, such as killing animals and sawing horns to sell in the black market at expensive prices. Furthermore, zoos also provide education. those in cities will never have a chance to see wild animals, although it is available on television and social platforms. Nothing compares with seeing a living creature in the zoo; as a result, they can gain more knowledge of the natural habitat, and raise awareness of protecting animals from dangers.
On the other hand, it is devastating to acknowledge that zoos are using rare species of animals to get profit from visitors and are immoral. Firstly, most animals live in social groups in the wild, so animals cannot adapt to the artificial environment and live alone. Therefore, endangered animals easily suffer from stress and mental health. Nevertheless, zoos do not aim at educational purposes instead make profits. For example, tourists make the environment more polluted when throwing rubbish and food into cages or surroundings, while zookeepers and staff without attention only collect entrance to the park.
To sum up, zoos are the home for endangered species; however, I think that the confined species are facing some problems
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, such as, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11929824561 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65121562506 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614035087719 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2729825689 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.214285714 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3571428571 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6428571429 7.06120827912 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223417263198 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786287514757 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566273634746 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140820594244 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245782947384 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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