Collectors prize the ancient life-size clay statues of human figures made on Kali lsland
but have long wondered how Kalinese artists were able to depict bodies with such real-
1stic precision. Since archaeologists have recently discovered molds of human heads
and hands on Kali, we can now conclude that the ancient Kalinese artists used molds
of actual bodies, not sculpting tools and techniques, to create these statues. This dis-
covery explains why Kalinese miniature statues were abstract and entirely different in
style: molds could be used only for life-size sculptures. It also explains why few ancient
Kalinese sculpting tools have been found. In light of this discovery, collectors predict
that the life-size sculptures will decrease in value while the miniatures increase in value.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in
order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are
reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to
evaluate the prediction.
The argument concludes that the the value of life-size sculptures will decrease and the value of miniatures will increase. The author has come to this conclusion on the evidence that molds of human heads and hands were found on Kali and comparatively less sculpting tools are found. The argument as it stands does not hold water, and additional questions need to be answered to make the argument stronger.
Firstly, were molds the only tools used to make the life-size sculptures? Perhaps other tools in addition to molds were used to give the realistic precision observed. Maybe the reason for the acute display of these statues is the result of an talented artist and the molds had nothing to do with the accurateness of the statues. Since the answer for the above question is not answered the argument rests on flaws and assumptions and more information is required to conclude that the value of tools will increase whereas the value of sculptures will decrease.
Secondly, is the searching for tools done in various different location? It is possible that the tools used to make the statues were kept in a safe location like a locker or room of statue artist. Maybe the search for tools is not done in the location of the artist room or locker where the tools are kept in abundant and ample amount. This maybe probably the reason why less number of tools are found. On the other hand it is possible that the mold were kept near the statue making place as they can be heavy, and shifting their places can be a tedious task and hence they are found in glut near the statue. So we cannot say that their presence in abundant number can be a cause to decrease in sculptures value. It is possible that the molds are actually less in number than the tools since the tools are yet to be extracted.
Lastly, is there any study done about the material of the tools? Perhaps the tools is made of decomposable material and hence it got decomposed overtime and this may be the reason that they are not easily found in numbers. We cannot say that until research is done. It can be the case that the molds are made of metals and hence they are found as they were in the past and the tools are made of wood and hence got decomposed over the years, we simply do not have an insight regarding them and hence coming to conclusion that their prices will fluctuate is not appropriate.
Although the author may not be evaluating the given situation in its entirety, the conclusion and information associated with it cannot be written-off either. There is no smoke without fire and the author must have had compelling reasons to make such a strong conclusion, however, since the reasons have not been listed here, the argument as it stands cannot be said holistic. More evidence is needed to make the given argument stronger.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 499 350
No. of Characters: 2273 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.726 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.555 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.35 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.762 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.305 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.323 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
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Line 1, column 284, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...atively less sculpting tools are found. The argument as it stands does not hold wat...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...splay of these statues is the result of an talented artist and the molds had nothi...
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Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: less
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
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Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2318.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 499.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64529058116 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42229614299 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.406813627255 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 728.1 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6379065017 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.380952381 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7619047619 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2380952381 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126705056251 0.218282227539 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405432067544 0.0743258471296 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401142962005 0.0701772020484 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0775556543051 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221201824608 0.0628817314937 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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