Nowadays, celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievement and this sets a bad example for many young people.
It is convienced that many celebrities are well-known because their wealth and luxury lives than their attainments. Personally, I am on the same page with that statement.
As an explanatory paragraph, the main reason is many super stars want to gain lots of benefits using their fame. It is because, they could earn much money if they have lots of viewers on their youtube channels via antimainstream contents but usually it has unusefulness materials. For example, they are showing their luxury homes or cars so many people would be amazed but actually it just makes lots of children watching a rubbish content for their lives and even make them to live in their dreamr or for the bad things as they force their parents to buy the same thing as well as in the content. It means, many celebrities must consider about their contents especially for children because they have not know about a real world.
Nevertheless, there are several drawbacks if citizens are not on the same line with this matter. Firstly, the parents did know about unusefulness contents that almost every single super star does for gaining a fame and it would have a few impacts for their children. It is caused by the parent did not want to know about their social media atmosphere which is bringing many influences for their children easily. As proof, the parent do not want to check their children social medias so they would not know about the program that their children watched. As the result, the children just want their parents to fullfil their desire same with their idols have. Secondly, the children would regard that every single person must be rich. This is coming from the content that almost every single day they see so it could make a mindset that become poor people is very bad. For the model, a young person forces their parents to become rich people so they could gain lots of thing from them because they always watch that children in the content could attain luxury things easily from their parents and unconsiously, they would be angry if their parents could not fullfil it. Thus, absolutely, children make several super stars as their role model in their lives and changes their mindset.
To sum up where my track, it is real that celebrities bring lots of impact for the children in every single places in the world so as the parents, citizens must manage what the content that the children must see.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 706, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
...ally for children because they have not know about a real world. Nevertheless, ther...
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Line 3, column 958, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of things'.
Suggestion: lots of things
...o become rich people so they could gain lots of thing from them because they always watch tha...
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Line 4, column 213, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the content that the children must see.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 24.0651302605 245% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 417.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76498800959 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3192734101 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446043165468 0.561755894193 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 587.7 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.4578774872 49.4020404114 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.1875 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0625 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311046694416 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123351401184 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854463669517 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202079115874 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0773102824599 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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