Nowadays people depend on technology for leisure activities. Is this a positive or negative development?
In recent years, technology has been of fundamental importance to human life; however, its’ presence in pastime activities has sparked a controversy among the general public. In my perspective, the drawbacks of human dependence on technology for their entertainment outweigh the advantages.
On the one hand, high-tech gadgets have the virtue of diverse categories of entertainment and widespread accessibility. In fact, digital entertainment brings a huge variety of choices to users, ranging from social media, games to streaming services or even fitness applications. Moreover, on account of the development of public Internet system, people possessing digital devices such as smartphones could easily connect to the wifi within their convenience and play online games or use social media everywhere. Besides, in order to enhance the availability of their products, game producers also develop offline gaming applications, which could be downloaded only in a short period of time.
On the other hand, the dependence on technology for amusement could pose a threat to human due to its adverse impact on health as well as interpersonal relationship. Spending too many hours on digital applications may predispose human to serious health problems such as poor vision, back pain and obesity. The underlying reason for this issue is the sedentary lifestyle, which could lead to muscle weakness and immunodeficiency. In addition, the substance of entertainment technology does not appear to be designed to foster in-person communication among people; therefore, people do not find it essential to maintain face-to-face interaction anymore and withdraw from all relationships that require direct conversation.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that digital leisure activities play a crucial role in human development by virtue of their convenience; however, I believe that the abuse of entertainment technology would affect negatively on human health and relationships.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: YOURS_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: An apostrophe is never used to form possessive case pronouns. Did you mean: 'its'?
Suggestion: its
...ntal importance to human life; however, its’ presence in pastime activities has spar...
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Line 1, column 160, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ies has sparked a controversy among the general public. In my perspective, the drawbacks of hu...
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Line 2, column 676, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ich could be downloaded only in a short period of time. On the other hand, the dependence on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.75342465753 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.33930627679 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623287671233 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.0881832254 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.727272727 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5454545455 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6363636364 7.06120827912 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210058490125 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712341883755 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597300133105 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127679213084 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049481856209 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.37 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.6 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.