It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree and disagree ?
In this day and age, there has been a growing emphasis on promoting a healthy lifestyle as a means of preventing illness. This has sparked a debate on whether it is more important to allocate public funds towards prevention or treatment. While both aspects are crucial, I firmly believe that spending public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle is of utmost importance.
To begin with, investing in promoting a healthy lifestyle can significantly reduce the burden of illness on individuals and society. By educating the public about the importance of regular exercise, proper nutrition, and stress management, we can prevent the onset of various diseases such as obesity, diabetes, and heart disease. These conditions not only lead to a decline in the quality of life for individuals but also place a heavy strain on healthcare systems. By preventing these illnesses, we can alleviate the pressure on healthcare resources and redirect them towards other pressing needs. Besides, promoting a healthy lifestyle enhances the overall quality of life. By prioritizing prevention, we can improve productivity and longevity. Healthy individuals are more likely to be active, engaged, and contribute positively to society. Additionally, a healthier population leads to reduced absenteeism, increased workforce productivity, and a lower burden on social welfare systems.
Moreover, promoting a healthy lifestyle empowers individuals to take control of their own health. By providing education and resources, we can encourage healthy behaviors and habits that can prevent the development of chronic diseases. This not only improves the overall well-being of individuals but also fosters a sense of responsibility and self-care. When individuals are equipped with the knowledge and tools to lead a healthy lifestyle, they are more likely to make informed choices that prevent illness and promote well-being. Furthermore, prevention is a proactive approach that addresses the root causes of illness. Treating people who are already ill is important, but it often involves managing symptoms and providing medical interventions. By focusing on prevention, we can tackle the underlying factors that contribute to illness, such as sedentary lifestyles, poor nutrition, and unhealthy habits. This holistic approach not only prevents illness but also promotes overall health and longevity.
In conclusion, while treatment for the already ill is important, I strongly agree that spending public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle for prevention is more crucial. By investing in prevention, we can reduce the burden of illness, empower individuals to take control of their health, and enhance overall quality of life. It is imperative that we prioritize prevention to build a healthier and happier society for the future.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 23.0 6.8 338% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 5.60731707317 517% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 33.7804878049 148% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 3.97073170732 453% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2393.0 965.302439024 248% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 425.0 196.424390244 216% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63058823529 4.92477711251 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 3.73543355544 122% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10210465446 2.65546596893 117% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 106.607317073 198% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496470588235 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 763.2 283.868780488 269% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.45097560976 124% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 1.53170731707 914% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 0.482926829268 1449% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 8.94146341463 246% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2317281187 43.030603864 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.772727273 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3181818182 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.59090909091 5.23603664747 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 3.70975609756 350% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 1.13902439024 790% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297636019106 0.215688989381 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907592018519 0.103423049105 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0968721023111 0.0843802449381 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211428605287 0.15604864568 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609907986064 0.0819641961636 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 61.2550243902 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.3012195122 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 11.4140731707 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.06136585366 118% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 40.7170731707 324% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 23.0 6.8 338% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 5.60731707317 517% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 33.7804878049 148% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 3.97073170732 453% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2393.0 965.302439024 248% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 425.0 196.424390244 216% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63058823529 4.92477711251 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 3.73543355544 122% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10210465446 2.65546596893 117% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 106.607317073 198% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496470588235 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 763.2 283.868780488 269% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.45097560976 124% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 1.53170731707 914% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 0.482926829268 1449% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 8.94146341463 246% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2317281187 43.030603864 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.772727273 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3181818182 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.59090909091 5.23603664747 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 3.70975609756 350% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 1.13902439024 790% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297636019106 0.215688989381 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907592018519 0.103423049105 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0968721023111 0.0843802449381 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211428605287 0.15604864568 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609907986064 0.0819641961636 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 61.2550243902 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.3012195122 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 11.4140731707 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.06136585366 118% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 40.7170731707 324% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.