Some people believe that the best way to produce a happier society is to ensure that there are only small differences between the richest and the poorest members. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Decades have witnessed the concern about how to create a more pleasurable and satisfied society. While it has been argued by some that the most effective way to address this problem is establishing a society with only a small difference between the prosperous and the penurious, I respectfully disagree with this assertion.
To commence with, the contentment standard varies depending on each individual’s perspective of life so the wealth gap is not the only thing determining the society's happiness. Indeed, it cannot be ensured that all people having sound financial backgrounds enjoy their lives as they may suffer from other problems that money cannot solve, especially mental life. To illustrate, Japan is known as a powerful nation wherein many citizens have high-quality lives but endure stress and even depression from work. By contrast, those people who are although have to deal with the financial burden but understand exactly what is their target in life and consistently strive for it are likely to live a more fulfilling life. Therefore, if people do not know how to create a rich spiritual life and pursue their ideals, eliminating class distinction is less likely to bring about a happier society.
Moreover, instead of trying to narrow the income gap, it should be better to use it as a motivation for people from low-income backgrounds to make an effort for a better life which leads to a continuously developing society. When there are differences among social classes, individuals are motivated to broaden their knowledge and work harder to achieve a high-quality life. As a result, it not only drives innovation but also fosters a sense of personal fulfillment and satisfaction derived from one’s accomplishments. It is evidenced that many students come from poor rural areas but have a high spirit of learning and become successful in later career paths. On the contrary, if everyone, regardless of whether rich or poor, enjoys the same welfare and material life, people will tend to be lazy and society will not develop in a more positive direction.
In conclusion, although some people opine that satisfaction in society can be achieved by reducing disparity in income groups, I disagree with this view as each person has their way of gaining a joyful life and to some extent, differences in social classes propel social mobility.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 384.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16927083333 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90010995474 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.5874217055 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.692307692 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5384615385 20.7667163134 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.30769230769 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166030882037 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053824235483 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583682018825 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115811055072 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049368840652 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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