Describe a journey you made in the past that you remember well You should say What forms of transport did you use why Who you traveled with What was good and bad about it and explain why you remember the trip so well

Essay topics:

Describe a journey you made in the past that you remember well
You should say:
What forms of transport did you use? why?
Who you traveled with?
What was good and bad about it and explain why you remember the trip so well?

Well, I'm going to talk about my trip to the Nha Trang beach on holiday next week. I had a week's holiday before I started my busy job. I absolutely didn't wanna go alone because I was frightened of traveling alone so I made the trip with my close-friend. his name is Loc. the transport we used were the bicycle because they are environmentally friendly and cheap of course. the beach is stunning, we traveled along the coast and saw plenty of white sand. the good things about the journey were that we met a lot of other people who were traveling. to be honest, we really liked to use the bicycle for our trip because we would like to be independent. in the other hands, we went to places which are difficult to reach on public transport. also, it was convenience and exciting. the bad things were the rain and the heat/ the weather because it made us tired. I had great memories of the trip for I felt really free. we could go where we liked. also, we met some very friendly people and we saw a lot of interesting places. I still have friends who I made during that trip. in all, I think it was the best journey I've ever made.
Thank you so much!!!

Votes
Average: 7.8 (37 votes)
Essay Categories

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
Well, Im going to talk about my trip to the Nha ...
^^
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: PRP_RB_NO_VB[1]
Message: Are you missing a verb?
...holiday before I started my busy job. I absolutely didnt wanna go alone because I was frightened...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ore I started my busy job. I absolutely didnt wanna go alone because I was frightened...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 254, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: His
...o I made the trip with my close-friend. his name is Loc. the transport we used were...
^^^
Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... with my close-friend. his name is Loc. the transport we used were the bicycle beca...
^^^
Line 1, column 373, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...nmentally friendly and cheap of course. the beach is stunning, we traveled along th...
^^^
Line 1, column 454, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...the coast and saw plenty of white sand. the good things about the journey were that...
^^^
Line 1, column 454, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...the coast and saw plenty of white sand. the good things about the journey were that...
^^^
Line 1, column 547, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...lot of other people who were traveling. to be honest, we really liked to use the b...
^^
Line 1, column 650, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...ecause we would like to be independent. in the other hands, we went to places whic...
^^
Line 1, column 738, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...difficult to reach on public transport. also, it was convenience and exciting. the b...
^^^^
Line 1, column 777, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... also, it was convenience and exciting. the bad things were the rain and the heat/ ...
^^^
Line 1, column 915, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...ies of the trip for I felt really free. we could go where we liked. also, we met s...
^^
Line 1, column 943, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...eally free. we could go where we liked. also, we met some very friendly people and w...
^^^^
Line 1, column 1072, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...ve friends who I made during that trip. in all, I think it was the best journey Iv...
^^
Line 1, column 1112, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
...in all, I think it was the best journey Ive ever made. Thank you so much!!!
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, really, so, still, well, i think, of course

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 932.0 1615.20841683 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 219.0 315.596192385 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.25570776256 5.12529762239 83% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4021042602 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575342465753 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 295.2 506.74238477 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.2975951904 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.4840288712 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 54.8235294118 106.682146367 51% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.8823529412 20.7667163134 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11764705882 7.06120827912 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.38176352705 46% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151752606145 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0513883804516 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601270032346 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184029302521 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0735461861072 0.056905535591 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.1 13.0946893788 39% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 84.68 50.2224549098 169% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 11.3001002004 39% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.54 12.4159519038 53% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 5.96 8.58950901804 69% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 78.4519038076 31% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.1190380762 67% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.33 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.