Question: Describe a product you bought that you were (or, are) happy with.You should say:What you boughtHow you bought itWhy you bought it

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Question: Describe a product you bought that you were (or, are) happy with.
You should say:
What you bought
How you bought it
Why you bought it

Well, about 2 months ago, I bought a Samsung smartphone that I was really satisfied with.
Answer: my cell phone was the newest product from Samsung, so there are various useful applications such as video calling, take pictures, emails, Facebook, games, music players, and so on. I've used this phone so frequently because it's easy to use and I carry it everywhere. Moreover, I intended to use this smartphone to listen to music, make phone calls, send messages and check emails. Hence, I must say that this portable device helps me a lot no matter where I am.
there were numerous reasons why I took an interest in this product. Firstly, I wanted to use it for entertainment purposes and use it to remember things. I could refresh myself after a hard day's work by enjoying music or watching reality shows on the internet. Also, I might review what happened by the camera phone which I've taken lots of photos of special occasions. For instance, in June I went on holiday to Hai Tac island and Ha Tien beach. they're stunning places, so I got some great pictures there. Then I upload them on Facebook, so my friends can see them. Furthermore, Thanks to this smartphone, I was able to keep in touch with my old friends whom I could not meet in person regularly. besides, this mobile phone helped me to handle my workload effectively. For example, I could check emails when waiting for the bus, which saved a lot of time.
As a final point, I would emphasize that I chose the mobile phone myself. that was the main reason why I felt blissful with this product.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 189, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
...ebook, games, music players, and so on. Ive used this phone so frequently because i...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...e helps me a lot no matter where I am. there were numerous reasons why I took an int...
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Line 3, column 190, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'day'?
Suggestion: day
...gs. I could refresh myself after a hard days work by enjoying music or watching real...
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Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
...what happened by the camera phone which Ive taken lots of photos of special occasio...
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Line 3, column 446, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Theyre
...ay to Hai Tac island and Ha Tien beach. theyre stunning places, so I got some great pi...
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Line 3, column 446, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...ay to Hai Tac island and Ha Tien beach. theyre stunning places, so I got some great pi...
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Line 3, column 697, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Besides
...m I could not meet in person regularly. besides, this mobile phone helped me to handle ...
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Line 4, column 74, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...e that I chose the mobile phone myself. that was the main reason why I felt blissful...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, moreover, really, so, then, well, for example, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1282.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59498207885 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51911921904 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652329749104 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.1352668897 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.4117647059 106.682146367 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4117647059 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0421798070212 0.244688304435 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0147825933695 0.084324248473 18% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0240881949802 0.0667982634062 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0395050950167 0.151304729494 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292828789096 0.056905535591 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 13.0946893788 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 12.4159519038 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 0.67 Out of 6
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