I am wondering whether the translation of this poetry can work or not. I know you're not supposed to correct this type of stuff. Many thanks..
It's late,
my dear nightingale,
fly away.
I find myself so fragile,
Is there anything in the afterlife?
I spend time playing tetris with the pieces of my life
and I try to match up each portion, avoiding any distortion,
answering back to customary gestures logic
iron topic
without knowing if are right my moves,
I'll pay then for my mistakes
so let my worries go away:
still the future is too future
and the past isn’t gone yet
for being able to look with distance to all the events
no regrets,
while grumbling between teeth and a hoary beard
as the time flew.
I am here to call me young again,
gibbering in vain,
looking myself in a broken mirror,
watching the wrinkles than I can count,
I'm here - I claim - willing to change, taking on my responsibilities
and why such a hurry to put on your shoulders those duties,
when there is still time left for unexplored pleasures, words full of treasures?
Where is the people like me?
Where are the writers?
Where is the people, trudging day and night living,
the ones who breathe absinthe and deny any other consent,
where are the false cursed poets,
alone I am here, warming up in a fire of conformism,
letting behind any virtuosism,
hearth hostile even to respectability
and enveloped in the flames, I wonder, I scream: where is the people like me?
The memory's pendulum beats out its rhythm,
I lose days, months and romantic sunsets,
often, I swear, the icy air of February I challenged
squandering sheer time at the window
believing in a promise -poor me-,
hoping to be sought from your face,
none embrace,
I waited in vain for a smile ...
Sad, mad because the sadness is the feeling that accompanies love,
when it must go,
a love that bleeds us,
and that makes us wrong.
How tricky and ambivalent is its own game:
fertile ground for growth or even pure blame.
There is no right neither wrong,
that's not a shame for the honest,
the winner has a chameleon heart
who can listen to the roars of this powerful muscle,
true blood and affection,
blue veins and vasodilation
couldn't you bring another into your bed?
You're systole and you're diastole,
you are a windless blade,
the nerve that hurts
eventually letting me in pain
wire bare without embroidery
you're exactly the regular exception
without perfection.
- TPO 10 - Integrated task 70
- If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer. 70
- Leaders like John F. Kennedy and Martin Luther King have made important contributions to the people of the United States. Name another world leader you think is important. Give specific reasons for your choice. 70
- TPO 10 - Independent taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 80
- I am wondering whether the translation of this poetry can work or not. I know you're not supposed to correct this type of stuff. Many thanks.. 80
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ahahahha.. thanks! So nice
ahahahha.. thanks! So nice from you.. I've made that attempt to translate from my language the poetry of a friend of mine.. Good to know that it worked!
The e-rater can't tell the score exactly, but we managed to give a score. It is a nice poem. We liked it.
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Score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 408 350
No. of Characters: 1795 1500
No. of Different Words: 257 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.494 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.4 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.404 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 29.315 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.273 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.347 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.145 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5