You have been having a class discussion on the people who influence the way we behave.
You have made the notes below.
Our family and friends
The media
Famous personalities
Write an essay for your tutor discussing two of the factors in your notes. You should explain which factor influences our behaviours the most, and provide reasons to support your opinion.
„No man is an island.“ All of us are less or more influenced by others, which lies on us a great deal of responsibility for wisely choosing those „others“, although we can affect it to some extent only.
The most significant impact of our lives have people who were given to us – our family, especially the nuclear one which contains our parents and siblings. They were here to help us understand the world around and how to feel about it. Is this world a safe and friendly place to live at? Am I welcomed here? Or should I be rather careful or even scared? Answers to such questions, often not expressed loudly, are crucial to form our views as well as self-awareness and self-confidence.
Psychologists believe that our personalities are almost done and dusted when we reach the age of five years. Is this the good or bad news? Given that we were lucky to be born to a loving family, probably we gained the ability to distinguish between good and bad (people, things, information…). On the other hand, if we were not born under a lucky star and our early years were rather hardship, we may be more likely in risk of being attracted by mean people who come our way or by bad ideas coming for example through media.
As indicated above, media is often to blame of having bad influence on us, but is it really the case? Undoubtedly media means one of the biggest player and powerful tool which can be misused not only for advertising purposes, but also, and more dangerously as a political actor, yet at the same time, in democratic system it works also as a watchdog that keeps an eye on those who are in charge.
In conclusion, however hard it is, the responsibility is ours. It is we who have to carefully pick our partners, friends, mates as well as schools and teachers for us and our children. It is also no-one else but we who decide which books, movies or websites are worthy our precious time. Nelson Mandella once said “With freedom comes responsibility” and I could not agree more.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possibly wrong smart opening quote: '“'.
Suggestion: “
„No man is an island.' All of us are...
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Message: Possibly wrong smart opening quote: '“'.
Suggestion: “
...esponsibility for wisely choosing those „others', although we can affect it ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nfidence. Psychologists believe that our personalities are almost done and du...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m comes responsibility' and I could not agree more.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, so, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1671.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62880886427 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84697438659 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590027700831 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.3196001612 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2941176471 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2352941176 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149178394461 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440219185711 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04818584898 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0823545081779 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198422420524 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.67 Out of 6
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