Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless, in fact, they actually prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
State your opinion and support it with reasons and/or examples from your own experience or observations.
Recently, the topical issue of luxurious and comfortable lifestyle has provoked a heated debate. Although fiercely contested by many, there is a widely held view that the public growing tendency towards financial values can profitably be conducive to powerful and self-reliant people. this is a belief with which I take issue. Provided with further statistics, a cogent argument will be presented before reaching a logical conclusion.
From a socioeconomic standpoint, the alarming trend of financial accumulation may commonly breed strong greed. this is due in part to the fact that the more people earn, the more they feel inadequate, and the more they strive to hoard materials, which further enslave them. As certain notable examples of this Mammon, the avarice for luxurious automobiles, flamboyant clothes, and fancy parties or trips, amongst youths, can be cited.
In addition, with a growing trend towards financial abundance will come a large number of <font size="4">pleasure-seeking </font>individuals looking exclusively for comfort. Not only will people be disincentivized to make progress educationally, but also they will increasingly become indolent and self-centered persons, while being dismissive of others and values. The concrete evidence of the desire for wealth comes from an extensive survey conducted in Norway in 2016, which established a close correlation between the public affluent ways of living and the riches they chiefly gain.
In conclusion, the cult of materialism seems to be bound up inextricably with present-day lifestyles of society as a whole and can create antisocial habits as long as they are not properly modified. Thus, it is my main contention that current shift in values would on no account bring about self-sufficient as well as robust personalities. However, with the benefit of hindsight, it seems that the further we research, the more we discover.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.5418719212 104% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 6.10837438424 147% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 8.36945812808 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 20.9802955665 91% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 31.9359605911 106% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1628.0 1207.87684729 135% => OK
No of words: 293.0 242.827586207 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55631399317 5.00649968141 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.55799387784 2.71678728327 131% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 139.433497537 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651877133106 0.580463131201 112% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 379.143842365 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 8.0 1.56157635468 512% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.71428571429 233% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.931034482759 322% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8842447053 50.4703680194 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.230769231 104.977214359 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5384615385 20.9669160288 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38461538462 7.25397266985 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 6.9802955665 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117482009708 0.242375264174 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0374248496259 0.0925447433944 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0233742214347 0.071462118173 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0672409859037 0.151781067708 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0250286959467 0.0609392437508 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 12.6369458128 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 53.1260098522 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.9458128079 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 11.5310837438 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.96 8.32886699507 120% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 55.0591133005 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.94827586207 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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