'It is as important for school children to study music, art and sport as it is for them to become literate and numerate.' How far do you agree with this statement? Support your point of view with reasons and / or examples from your own experience.
The importance of music, art and sport, which was always debatable have now become more controversial. The substantial influence of music, art and sport have sparked the controversy over the potential impact on the children in the recent year. In my opinion, music, art and sport are important for school children as it is for them to become literate and numerate, while others may disagree with this opinion of mine. This essay will elaborate my opinion in greater details and thus will lead to a logical conclusion.
At the outset, there are numerous reasons why music, art and sport are important for school children, but the most conspicuous one stems from the fact that each subject have their own way to develop a child. For instance, music and art can help to develop a child's communicating and interactive skills whereas sport can improve the physical development. Furthermore, at the initial stage, it be very difficult for children to find their area of interest. So, if they are introduce to this subject they can understand their interest and strength better. Hence, music, art and sport are as important as other subjects.
Another key justification for upholding this notion is that, in this modern and competitive world, it can very handy to have skills on music, art and sport. It gives an edge over other person. Furthermore, no one knows which skill might come in hand in the future. Besides, having these skill on music, art and sport helps to develop an individual's personality, which in turn, makes the person more socially involved. Thus studying music, art and sport can be very helpful for school children.
From what has been discussed above, it can be concluded that studying music, art and sport are important for school children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, thus, whereas, while, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 6.10837438424 164% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 8.36945812808 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 5.94088669951 101% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 20.9802955665 110% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 31.9359605911 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.75862068966 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1207.87684729 122% => OK
No of words: 295.0 242.827586207 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98983050847 5.00649968141 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62984003389 2.71678728327 97% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 139.433497537 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528813559322 0.580463131201 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 448.2 379.143842365 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6551724138 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5024630542 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7973213485 50.4703680194 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1333333333 104.977214359 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.9669160288 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 7.25397266985 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.33497536946 75% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 6.9802955665 186% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307943707023 0.242375264174 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118071518117 0.0925447433944 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0974426955965 0.071462118173 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217597293872 0.151781067708 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433520495112 0.0609392437508 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 12.6369458128 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.1260098522 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.9458128079 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 11.5310837438 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.32886699507 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 55.0591133005 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.3980295567 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 82.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 74.5 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.