the law can change human behavior . do you agree or not?
Recently, the phenomenon of law enforcement has sparked an ongoing controversy, which inevitably leads to a moot question “can law change human behavior?”. Whereas it is a widely held view that introducing the law can alter <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-1276F11D73225767E186560835FAF3F0" data-pwa-rule-id="DET_CG_2" data-pwa-category="grammar" data-pwa-hint="Possible missing determiner" data-pwa-suggestions="an individual~the individual" data-pwa-dictionary-word="individual" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">individual</pwa>’s attitudes, I will discuss controversial aspects of that throughout this essay.
From the ethical and social standpoint, patterns of behavior <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-96ED49FF1D9209E5AAC9D5E4DFB4E1A3" data-pwa-rule-id="null" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="" data-pwa-dictionary-word="are bound" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">are bound</pwa> up inextricably with social norms, which <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-D9D108FBE02640FD73303BD589933694" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_2061" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: show" data-pwa-suggestions="show" data-pwa-dictionary-word="indicate" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">indicate</pwa> it might lead to both law-abiding and unlawful activities. As a well-known example, a longitudinal study conducted by eminent scientists in 2014 <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-7CCF0DDF245BF3899CC0FEDADB9296A2" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_2033" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: shows" data-pwa-suggestions="shows" data-pwa-dictionary-word="demonstrates" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">demonstrates</pwa> the relationship between moral corruption and committing a crime <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-D3930B213B09923F929004741CA5BA54" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_117" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: and" data-pwa-suggestions="and" data-pwa-dictionary-word="as well as" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">as well as</pwa> an exponential increase in violent acts. Their academic criticism was impressive. Researchers<pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-53045062A4A5A9CA936221A31EB03D74" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_542" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by removing this" data-pwa-suggestions="(omit)" data-pwa-dictionary-word=", nevertheless," class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">, nevertheless,</pwa> paid heed to rehabilitation, community services, and severe punishments alike. <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-A43422815D4F070F6CFA5FCC44086E41" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_814" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: My" data-pwa-suggestions="My" data-pwa-dictionary-word="Consequently, my" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">Consequently, my</pwa> empirical evidence presented <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-45413ECFD31FD7B878B312AD737965D8" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_218" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by removing this" data-pwa-suggestions="(omit)" data-pwa-dictionary-word="thus far " class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">thus far </pwa>supports the contention that <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-871808FFEA631AE968376CE361511D85" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="it correlates positively the likelihood of observing the law~they correlate positively the likelihood of observing the law" data-pwa-dictionary-word="the likelihood of observing the law is correlated positively" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">the likelihood of observing the law </pwa><pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-871808FFEA631AE968376CE361511D85" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="it correlates positively the likelihood of observing the law~they correlate positively the likelihood of observing the law" data-pwa-dictionary-word="the likelihood of observing the law is correlated positively" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">is correlated</pwa><pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-871808FFEA631AE968376CE361511D85" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="it correlates positively the likelihood of observing the law~they correlate positively the likelihood of observing the law" data-pwa-dictionary-word="the likelihood of observing the law is correlated positively" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done"> positively</pwa> with not only shaping social conducts but also developing better habits.
Within the realm of legislation, without the slightest doubt, crime prevention attribute to enforcing the law, in that it would come down to the death penalty, harsh sentences, and passing a fine. A salient example of such attribution is juvenile delinquencies, which is a cause for concern since they were mistaken to take legal advice for granted. Had there been a paradigm shift earlier, scholars might have <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-611790390AEA55AE3A94905D85238689" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_1071" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: could" data-pwa-suggestions="could" data-pwa-dictionary-word="had the opportunity to" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">had the opportunity</pwa><pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-611790390AEA55AE3A94905D85238689" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_1071" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: could" data-pwa-suggestions="could" data-pwa-dictionary-word="had the opportunity to" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done"> to</pwa> <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-3734B8960787803480A7A129D4F407C7" data-pwa-rule-id="DET_CG_2" data-pwa-category="grammar" data-pwa-hint="Possible missing determiner" data-pwa-suggestions="an existing~the existing" data-pwa-dictionary-word="existing" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">existing</pwa> rule’s problems. Likewise, hardly had they confined their attention to legal responsibilities, state legislatures, and even tough regulations. Hence, it is reasonable to infer the pivotal role of enacting strict laws in altering <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-4B44E238BD079E7680433606E7183EEA" data-pwa-rule-id="DET_CG_2" data-pwa-category="grammar" data-pwa-hint="Possible missing determiner" data-pwa-suggestions="an individual~the individual" data-pwa-dictionary-word="individual" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">individual</pwa>’s traits.
To conclude<pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-709972869D4E5AE6E75DE30E795C8E64" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_420" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by removing this" data-pwa-suggestions="(omit)" data-pwa-dictionary-word=", as for myself," class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">, as for myself,</pwa> as the saying goes “all’s well that ends well,” after analyzing what elaborated above, I entirely agree that law can change human behavior. Meanwhile, the local authorities <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-2E7D714540DE9765F01AFFE6058C5B23" data-pwa-rule-id="null" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="" data-pwa-dictionary-word="are recommended" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">are recommended</pwa> to enforce some strict legislation, and <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-6B0AD1BCA9C3579172936435C0A82C4E" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="I hope individuals~we hope individuals~they hope individuals~it hopes individuals~it hope individuals~I hopes individuals~someone hopes individuals~we hopes individuals~someone hope individuals~they hopes individuals~something hope individuals" data-pwa-dictionary-word="individuals are hoped" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">individuals</pwa><pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-6B0AD1BCA9C3579172936435C0A82C4E" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="I hope individuals~we hope individuals~they hope individuals~it hopes individuals~it hope individuals~I hopes individuals~someone hopes individuals~we hopes individuals~someone hope individuals~they hopes individuals~something hope individuals" data-pwa-dictionary-word="individuals are hoped" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done"> </pwa><pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-6B0AD1BCA9C3579172936435C0A82C4E" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="I hope individuals~we hope individuals~they hope individuals~it hopes individuals~it hope individuals~I hopes individuals~someone hopes individuals~we hopes individuals~someone hope individuals~they hopes individuals~something hope individuals" data-pwa-dictionary-word="individuals are hoped" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">are hoped</pwa> to heighten their intellect.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ve verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead.' da...
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...ve verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead.' da...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, likewise, may, nevertheless, so, thus, well, whereas, while, as for, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 10.5418719212 266% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 6.10837438424 295% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 8.36945812808 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 20.9802955665 300% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 31.9359605911 200% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 5.75862068966 191% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 9902.0 1207.87684729 820% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 795.0 242.827586207 327% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 12.4553459119 5.00649968141 249% => Less chars per word wanted.
Fourth root words length: 5.30996651211 3.92707691288 135% => OK
Word Length SD: 13.4745314686 2.71678728327 496% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 333.0 139.433497537 239% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418867924528 0.580463131201 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 2754.0 379.143842365 726% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 3.5 1.57093596059 223% => Avg_syllables_per_word is high.
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.6157635468 238% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 1.56157635468 640% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 1.71428571429 292% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.931034482759 430% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.65517241379 192% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 12.6551724138 174% => OK
Sentence length: 36.0 20.5024630542 176% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 285.272354279 50.4703680194 565% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 450.090909091 104.977214359 429% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 36.1363636364 20.9669160288 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 7.25397266985 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.33497536946 150% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 6.9802955665 186% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0158353394263 0.242375264174 7% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0248547477034 0.0925447433944 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601686147101 0.071462118173 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0259122248686 0.151781067708 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287018889455 0.0609392437508 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 55.3 12.6369458128 438% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -125.8 53.1260098522 -237% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 22.9 6.54236453202 350% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 39.8 10.9458128079 364% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 55.58 11.5310837438 482% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.09 8.32886699507 121% => OK
difficult_words: 235.0 55.0591133005 427% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 9.94827586207 206% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.3980295567 158% => OK
text_standard: 56.0 10.5123152709 533% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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