Obesity has been linked to excessive sugar consumption. Some people believe that sugary drinks should be taxed to dissuade people from drinking them while others think that a tax is unnecessary and that public education is the best way to decrease sugar c

Recent studies in the medical science have linked obesity with excessive consumption of sugar. In order to fight against obesity, some people believe that sugary drinks should be taxed to discourage its consumption, while other argue that educating the public is the best way to solve this problem. This easy will discuss why public awareness to discourage excessive sugar consumption is the best way and why imposing new taxes is not an effective way.

The public should be educated about the excessive consumption of sugar because it causes obesity. People should be told that the obesity is the root cause of many deceases. For this government should organize different public awareness events that can help people to understand how unnecessary sugar cause different health problem like obesity.

We cannot force people to reduce sugar consumption rather we can educate them about them about the harms of excessive sugar consumption. Therefore, implementing new taxes on the sugary product is not an effective way to reduce sugar consumption. It may help the government to increase their revenue but may not help to discourage sugar consumption. Moreover, it may cause widespread dissatisfaction among the general public.

Obesity is a worldwide problem especially in developed countries and the main cause of obesity is excessive use of sugar. This easy discussed why public education is the best way to discourage people from using sugar. Therefore, I believe that people should be educated about harms of excessive sugar consumption.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 74, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'them about'.
Suggestion: them about
...sugar consumption rather we can educate them about them about the harms of excessive sugar consumptio...
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Line 5, column 410, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...se widespread dissatisfaction among the general public. Obesity is a worldwide problem espe...
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Line 7, column 315, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t harms of excessive sugar consumption.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.5418719212 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 6.10837438424 196% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 8.36945812808 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 5.94088669951 84% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 20.9802955665 91% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 31.9359605911 94% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.75862068966 243% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1308.0 1207.87684729 108% => OK
No of words: 243.0 242.827586207 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38271604938 5.00649968141 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 3.92707691288 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8001446703 2.71678728327 103% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 139.433497537 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477366255144 0.580463131201 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 425.7 379.143842365 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.6157635468 130% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.65517241379 27% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.5024630542 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0034381898 50.4703680194 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.615384615 104.977214359 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6923076923 20.9669160288 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.38461538462 7.25397266985 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 6.9802955665 57% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 2.75862068966 217% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.51091789999 0.242375264174 211% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.192989817559 0.0925447433944 209% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101930099343 0.071462118173 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.329887266379 0.151781067708 217% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.08405052531 0.0609392437508 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 12.6369458128 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 53.1260098522 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.9458128079 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 11.5310837438 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.32886699507 93% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 55.0591133005 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.94827586207 116% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.3980295567 88% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.5123152709 133% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 63.0 Out of 90
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