People should get retire to made a way for young people. Give opinion

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People should get retire to made a way for young people. Give opinion

In this modern world, there is an ongoing deliberation among people on how retirement affect to contry's economy. While some people argue that the disadvantages overweigh the advantages of it, on my point of view retirement give more benefits to a country. In this essay, I shall discuss on the factors, while analyzing both sides of it.

First and foremost, there are myriad of advantages in retirement such as it gives opportunity for younger people to find employments. For example, young people have more creative ideas, according to the prevailing market conditions. Consequentely, organizations can restructure or reshape their marketing strategies with the contribution of their ideas. If old people get extention in their job contracts there will be frustration among young people which would be used in harmeful ways by riots.

On the other hand, ageing population is a global issue in this current context. For instance, some governments have to incurr lucrative expenditure of funds in pension payments. Moreover, organizations can use old people's skill and expertisism in their field of work for the betterment of the country as well. In addition, working will reduce the frustration of the elderly people because, they are with less family commitments and have more time compared with a young personal who has more obligations in office a nd home as well.

In conclusion, it is recommended to manage a balance an optimal level of young and elderly population inside an organization in maximizing profits. It is also beleived that, governments have to implement a contributory pension scheme to mitigate the burden of paying pensions to elderly people together with introducing new courses to the education system to cater the modern world employement.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on my point of view retirement give more benefits to a country. In this essay, I ...
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Line 3, column 355, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s with the contribution of their ideas. If old people get extention in their job c...
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Line 5, column 478, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...more time compared with a young personal who has more obligations in office a nd ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1492.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30960854093 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04356400842 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601423487544 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9527627527 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.769230769 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6153846154 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234517996593 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786525996336 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673690258675 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132310142315 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0797630477662 0.056905535591 140% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.67 Out of 6
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