Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are role models for youngsters. Do you support it or not? (Agree/ disagree)
In recent times, sports celebrities who are extremely successful around the world are being taken into consideration as role models for hundreds of young people. From my perspective, I partially believe that celebrities have a positive impact on young people lives because I am of the opinion that they might be a positive and a negative influence at the same time.
One reason to believe that sports stars do not play a critical part in youngsters' lives is that there are some of them who have addictions, mental disorders, and live a life full of excess. young people are not prepared enough to understand the difference between a positive or negative role model. Therefore, they can identify actions such as drinking, consuming drugs, and partying all the time as appropriate patterns of behaviour. For that reason, some of the sports stars do not provide youngsters with ethics, values, and good manners.
On the other hand, celebrities who are recognised by their contribution to sports are people who tend to have exceptional qualities and skills. sports celebrities are prone to be disciplined, talented, and hardworking. For instance, a soccer player who comes from a humble background is able to teach children and adolescents that their particular conditions do not determine their future or success in life, but their commitment and skills are the aspects which will help them to achieve their goals.
To conclude, although supporters believe that sports stars may play an important role in young people's lives, I still think that their influence is not appropriate or relevant to their future. therefore, it is highly recommended that youngsters should weigh both sides before admiring these people as great models.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, still, therefore, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.5418719212 142% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 6.10837438424 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 8.36945812808 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 5.94088669951 252% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 26.0 20.9802955665 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 31.9359605911 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1207.87684729 121% => OK
No of words: 280.0 242.827586207 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21071428571 5.00649968141 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 3.92707691288 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82195971492 2.71678728327 104% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 139.433497537 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578571428571 0.580463131201 100% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 379.143842365 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.931034482759 537% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.5024630542 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.4794280986 50.4703680194 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.636363636 104.977214359 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4545454545 20.9669160288 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 7.25397266985 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.33497536946 94% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 6.9802955665 129% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 2.91625615764 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198778007127 0.242375264174 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0771667195298 0.0925447433944 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685338565981 0.071462118173 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117579681887 0.151781067708 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447028709286 0.0609392437508 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 12.6369458128 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.1260098522 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.9458128079 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 11.5310837438 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.32886699507 107% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 55.0591133005 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.94827586207 136% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.3980295567 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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