Holidays are celebrated to commemorate the contributions of great epic personalities or an memorable event or in favor of festivals. However, I would like to create a holiday called "The Care and Share Day". I base my opinion on a concept called "re-vitalization of the helpless"
First, the reason why I chose this day is; In my view it's very important to care about others just like we care about ourselves. Re-distribution is a serious need of today. The rich keep getting richer and the poor stay helpless. Why should there be a difference? How did these social classes sprout up in our soci...
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Sentence: The rich keep getting richer and the poor stay helpless.
Description: The word keep is not usually used as a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to keep
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to stay and helpless
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