It is necessary to be competitive in order to succeed in life.
I disagree with the idea that it is necessary to be competitive to succeed in life. Sometimes life offers no alternative to competing, but there are better options most of the time. Competing against someone else usually requires too much energy. Also competition often leads to somebody’s feelings getting hurt. I think cooperation is easier and nicer than competition.
First of all, I think that competing is usually a waste of energy. Competition is about feeling superior to someone else, which usually involves spending more energy than other person. Take myself as example, once my frien...
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Sentence Length SD: 4.795 7.5
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No. of Different Words: 200 200
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Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
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Hi, I apologist that this essay is a copy of some resource. I just would like to ask how much it would be scored. I just feel that it too simple and personal, and I'm not sure that I should follow this style. Thank you.