Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that young people are more interest to know about celebrities and famous people than older people. Because this kind of issues is more important for them than older people. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that there are a lot of aged people who seriously following the famous peoples, interest to celebrities are related to personal beliefs of each people, not age. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that celebrities are more attractive for young people than for old people.
First and foremost, when people are young each new things can be led to exciting them, because in this aged person naturally have more energy and are happier. they want to find their goal and celebrities give this idea to them. For young people everything that a lot of the number of people follow that are interesting and it is important for friends groups. However, older people found their aims on their life so these things are not very important for them. For example, when I was a teenager I was loved Lala Hatami she is a famous actor in Iran and I had a lot of the number of her poster and films and followed her website. But now she is continuing my favorite actor but I never even follow news about her. Because now I have more major things to do.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that adult people live in the real world they have a lot of responsibility for themselves and their families. they usually, should work very hard and think about eliminating needs of their family. it is possible that some busy people do not go to the cinema more than one year.
finally, older people received to social maturity, it means that they find strong and stable personality so they do not research for a champion. They know what they want from society and themselves. therefore, following celebrities are unreasonable and sometimes laughing for them.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that, it is not reasonable that celebrities have the high impact for old people. because of some psychological aspects and alternation in living condition and their roles in life and also the maturity of their personality.
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- TPO 40 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... any of this concern or responsibility. the modern lifestyle force a lot of stress ...
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Suggestion: Because
... impact on young people than the adult. because of some natural mentally alternation in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, so, still, for example, kind of, on the other hand, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71349862259 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.456602206 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487603305785 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2657060419 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.066666667 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19447926894 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768894811054 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577905007955 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127184004131 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445598315735 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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