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Celebrities and famous people are one of those people who can have a deep influence on societies. But are they always right? Some people say that because famous people have lots of experiences, we must listen to tell and even obey them. But in my view, famous people are not goodness; they are normal humans exactly like us and it is why, I believe we should not pay that much close attention to the opinion of famous people.
Firstly, famous people are like other people. Each person has his own life, full of different experiences which may worth to spread these experience in all around the word. Exactly like what the TED talk show does. Because, they believe every one say at least one lesson to teach us. It can be same about the life experience of famous people too. They have experienced so many hardships in their life; we can learn from them a lot and keep ourselves motivated. Actor Will Smith is one of my role models. He had a difficult life, but could overcome all of them and become a famous actor as he always had its dream. That’s why I selected his as one of my role models. But, I do not believe everything he says and sometimes prefer to have my own opinion even if it’s in contrast of his opinion. In my eyes, famous people can make wrong too, they are just normal people who the flashes of cameras and expensive cloths had made them a little more different than us; so, that’s why I think we should not always listen to them, why so, they may not be good leaders and just misled us.
Secondly, each person has a different personality type. In my view, all of us as humans are unique. No one is exactly like us. When we do not be like others, it means that we will want different things and even if we want the same thing that someone else wants, we have our own reasons for wanting that. No one can tell you what to do in your life to be happy. Because, no one is exactly like you. I have a friend who liked fame as much as I liked. But she listened to one of her favorite actors and started her career as an actress, but I just liked to gain fame in scientific fields, so I did some projects in the field of my academic major and could win some prizes for them. We both liked one thing, but we had our own way to achieve our goal.
To cut the long story short, famous people can teach us a lot and motivate us. Whenever we look at their life experiences, we can learn that all hard times will finally go away and if we don’t stop following our dreams, we can make them come true. But in my view, we must pay attention to the opinion of famous people only when we need some motivation. We must have a deep belief in ourselves too and trust to the true feeling that comes within our heart. Why so, most of the times your heart does not lie to you and the best way to do something is to following your own heart not others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...actly like what the TED talk show does. Because, they believe every one say at least on...
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Line 3, column 964, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...s had made them a little more different than us; so, that's why I think we shou...
^^^^
Line 5, column 362, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ou what to do in your life to be happy. Because, no one is exactly like you. I have a f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, at least, i think, in contrast, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 92.0 43.0788530466 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2326.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 549.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.23679417122 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20344571268 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43897996357 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 743.4 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.964289749 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.2068965517 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9310344828 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75862068966 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.017025303413 0.236089414692 7% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0066759740303 0.076458572812 9% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0353259340866 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0186973763303 0.150856017488 12% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323848057723 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.31 10.9000537634 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.43 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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