It has recently been announced that a large shopping center may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
What would happen to my neighborhood? What are the benefits after execution of this project? Would all the neighbors accept it? All these question have asked by me after I read the announced of building a new large shopping center in neighborhood. Some of people refute this idea and they believe that it will bring many problems to the district. While after thinking on its benefit, I strongly agree with this plan.
First of all, many of people find difficulties to having a good job with a good salary. Some of my friends whom live in the same block finished their studying and still waiting the job that fit with their qualification. So this project will provide many job opportunities for many of them. For example, one of my friend has a certification in civil engineer and he search many time for a good job, so when the company start building shopping center it need civil engineer to continue their working. So it opens a chance to him to work with this firm and have a good salary.
Second, building a large shopping center will make our life easier, because all it provides what we need easily and with any efforts. If the mall builds in neighborhood that will save much time to buy our needs. For instance: I need to make dinner to my friend, while I check my stuff, I found that I didn’t have enough flour to make pasta for them and the time was too late. So I took my car to go to nearest mall which is away from my home by ten kilometer and there was a congestion, so I embarrassed from my friend because I was late about one hour from the date of the dinner, but I think after building this center this thing will go easy .
Finally, building such that center in my neighborhood will bring many advantages of the neighborhood as whole. It can assist in improving the economy of the area, because many of the people from different country will make shopping in this mall. So the area around this country will develop and it attracts many consumers to spend their money in order to improve the general appearance it.
To sum up, many of my neighbors oppose the idea of building new shopping center in our area, while in my consideration it’s an excellent project that contribute to adapt the situation of the neighborhood.
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Sentence: For example, one of my friend has a certification in civil engineer and he search many time for a good job, so when the company start building shopping center it need civil engineer to continue their working.
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace search with verb, past tense
Sentence: So I took my car to go to nearest mall which is away from my home by ten kilometer and there was a congestion, so I embarrassed from my friend because I was late about one hour from the date of the dinner, but I think after building this center this thing will go easy .
Description: The fragment I embarrassed from is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace embarrassed with verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
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