Because of the busy pace of modern life, many children spend most of their time indoors and have little exposure to the natural world. Discuss the effects lack of experience with and understanding of nature can have on children as they grow up.

Submitted by Ml980510 on Mon, 07/23/2018 - 23:54

In the presence of children’s significant time indoors, they scarcely enjoy the fresh air in greenery. This phenomenon has led to an uprise of terrifying effects on growing kids. In the essay, I will describe the impacts on them.

Opting in-house activities have a direct and indirect drawback in their development. The detrimental impact on children in getting to workplace. Most often, they acquire little knowhow in the process of workplace with limited communication. As they grow up, the way which getting used to work is hindered, they are both equipped with inadequate potentials and work with lack of experience gained, they will be regarded as not capable and productive enough to survive in nature.

Another negative effect on children is that they might find hard to communicate with others. They may fear their words will be twisted and used against them who were isolated from society from a long while and learnt little about interpersonal relationships, how one another get along and so on. They are used to communicating with friends in the internet social chat groups with lack of face-to-face conversations and fail to look into people’s true character. That has a severe hazardous impact on them. They might get addicted to pornography and violence in video games and TV. As they speak they either fear in looking into others’ eyes or they fear might hurt others’ feelings. They would simply shut down and become isolated in society.

In summary, children who get in touch with the outside world is something should not be neglected. Thus, I believe children should not be stayed long indoors as the negative effects on them can be disastrous, in terms of future work experience as well as social barrier.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 136, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...in greenery. This phenomenon has led to an uprise of terrifying effects on growing kids. ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, so, thus, well, while, in summary, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1469.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11846689895 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86915973797 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585365853659 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.2153454666 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8125 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9375 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246550775003 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755069367077 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454072013955 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15090452855 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045042550253 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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