The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

A glance at the provided maps illustrate the changes of an island from a deserted place to a modern tourist destination.

This is such a clear-cut evidence from the above maps that the island becomes more attractive and gorgeous. Besides, constructors take advantages of not only the island, but also surrounding seawater to build several tourist comforts.

Coming to the first map which shows the island before being constructed, it cannot be denied that the island looks inhabited with only land, natural beach, and coconut-trees. These trees grow most on the east side of the island and some on west side. Sea covers all the north, east, and south. There is a beach existing to the west of the island.

Nevertheless, after the construction of the tourist conveniences, the island has changed significantly. It can be seen clearly that the second map has three main areas. First, the beach is desinged and equipped to be suitable and safe for swimming purpose. Second, the southern sea that has nothing before is used to make pier. This innovation allows people to take some outdoor activities with sailboats. Visitors can walk from the beach or use vehicle track to come to the island that is the final area. As can be seen, a reception is built at the central island. To the north of the reception, a restaurant is constructed to serve tourists. The unique thing is that all of the coconut-trees are still remained. A large number of accommodations surround the trees that is on the left hand and appear in oval shape next to the others coconut-trees.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 670, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...erve tourists. The unique thing is that all of the coconut-trees are still remained. A lar...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 715, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
...f the coconut-trees are still remained. A large number of accommodations surround the trees that ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, look, nevertheless, second, so, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1299.0 965.302439024 135% => OK
No of words: 266.0 196.424390244 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88345864662 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80443316628 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 106.607317073 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582706766917 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 390.6 283.868780488 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 8.94146341463 190% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0880130711 43.030603864 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.4117647059 112.824112599 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6470588235 22.9334400587 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.23603664747 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196556528519 0.215688989381 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589229965935 0.103423049105 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492438274481 0.0843802449381 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120028715913 0.15604864568 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0181519522601 0.0819641961636 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.2329268293 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.3012195122 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 40.7170731707 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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