Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate.
Which do you agree with?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Over the past decades, conventional teaching has broadly translated into an entertaining activities between teachers and students. Alongside this changing pattern in majority of educational institutions, the latest sociological discoveries has casted light on its desired outcome of intensifying teaching efficiency and alleviating academic pressure. The aim of this essay is set to explore these advantages with supports underpinned by those academic work.
To begin with, it is intuitively obvious that incorporating entertainment into curriculum is widely perceived as a remedy for strain given by school. What this means is that the contemporary assessment methods entailing homework and examinations necessitates a vigorous lifestyle in order to lay the groundwork for further study, whereby the ensuing stress from such qualification is best unwind by entertainment. For instance, recent empirical research from the Hong Kong University established that junior learners who experience an entertaining means of education are less likely to be stricken by academic pressure, which was the main culprit of student’s suicide case in last year. Consistent with this line of thinking, coupled with accompanying interaction with teachers, the entertaining elements embedded in cultivation is likely to ameliorate the pressure from routine academic work around young students.
Meanwhile, another pivotal component to remember is that enjoyable learning, to a considerable extend, can foster the progress on acquiring knowledge. This is because students who are in their formative years are mostly impressionable, and practical experience has a vitally important role to play on implanting message in their memories. In fact, after being interviewed by an extensive study conducted by the Education Society, 90% secondary school students admitted language acquisition is considerably eased by immersing themselves in enjoyable English lessons encompassing western movie playing and classical drama participation. Consequently, joining a class with entertainment pervasively constitutes a positive driver on cultivation and enrichment in certain disciplines.
Overall, there is undeniable evidence suggested that learning with entertainment has a crucial significance on relieving academic strain and reinforcing the quality of learning. Given the strength of evidence, it is predicted that the means of enlightenment will pervasively become more entertaining in foreseeable future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 90, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'activity'?
Suggestion: activity
...broadly translated into an entertaining activities between teachers and students. Alongsid...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, second, so, while, for instance, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 6.14613180516 5.12529762239 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.39418085953 2.80592935109 121% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65329512894 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 506.74238477 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.5431616429 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.0 106.682146367 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8461538462 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.077978723379 0.244688304435 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0270543681541 0.084324248473 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0205040328276 0.0667982634062 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0437337756502 0.151304729494 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0134523271846 0.056905535591 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.0 13.0946893788 160% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 19.71 50.2224549098 39% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.69 12.4159519038 151% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.35 8.58950901804 132% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 78.4519038076 181% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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