In the argument, the author states that the number of accidents involving mopeds would drop 50 percent if the number of rental mopeds were limited. To support his claim, he cites the achievement of the neighboring island of Seaville made last year. However, the argument presented by the author is based on unverified assumptions. Hence, the author needs to provide more evidence to make the argument more persuasive.
First off, the author states that mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation. Even if the rented mopeds are the main reason of accidents, after limiting the number of rental mopeds people might prefer to travel with car. Traveling with a car in a island is more risky than traveling with a moped, and if an accident were to happen the casualty would definitely be much more serious. Thus, this argument is unwarranted without excluding such probabilities.
Moreover, the author state that the neighboring island of Seaville achieved 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents last year. Nevertheless, the author fails to take into account other factors that might contribute to such situation. The weather, for example, is a crucial factor that might cause an accident. Or perhaps the sidewalk in the neighboring island is wider than Balmer island, and thus reducing the number of mopeds would be a great option to reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds.
To sum up, it might be true that limiting the number of rental mopeds is an option. Yet, the author’s argument is built upon some assumptions that are not proven to be true. Therefore, the author should provide more details to support his argument. One example is hardly sufficient to form a general conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- minimum 3 arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 282 350
No. of Characters: 1389 1500
No. of Different Words: 141 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.098 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.926 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.595 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 68 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.918 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.812 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.356 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 258, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and of Seaville made last year. However, the argument presented by the author is ...
^^
Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ravel with car. Traveling with a car in a island is more risky than traveling wit...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1438.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 282.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09929078014 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73867247865 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528368794326 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.73421217 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.875 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198783689942 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638759699329 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803208837901 0.0701772020484 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12410554205 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561955659886 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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