The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The statement here suggests that by instilling in young people a sense of cooperation instead of competition, they can be prepared in the best way for leadership in government, industry, or other fields. Although I agree with the statement mostly, I do not agree with the fact that the sense of competition is not required for leadership roles.
Firstly, leadership is a quality that requires an understanding of the needs of the people. One can achieve this if he or she has a sense of cooperation towards others. For example, a textile industry CEO should be able to tell if his staff is happy with their work, or whether or not all of their customers are happy. All of them may have a different set of needs, which will require the CEO to adjust a few things trying to cooperate with them. Furthermore, It is better for the industry and its people if the CEO is aware of his or her staff or business associates.
One can take any field that requires leadership, may it be government or an industry or it can be an IT company developing softwares, the one factor that stands out in all of these fields is that all of them have people. So if a person can understand their needs or problems by getting along with them, that not only makes the people happy and encouraged, but also makes the government or industry to be at their best side. There is no better feeling than knowing that your leader understands you and he will cooperate with you in good times and bad.
Although having a sense of cooperation is very important for a leader to have, we cannot ignore the fact that to become a leader one will always have competition. If a leadership role is available in government or an industry, there will always be a few people who would want to be in that position. So having a sense of competition would really help out in standing out amongst the people who would be applying for the role. Furthermore, it is important to know what the others in your field are up to, in order to stay up with the current demands. Being aware of your competition in a market will ultimately help you in making your own company stand out from the rest and be better.
In conclusion, the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership role in any field would be by instilling in them a sense of cooperation which would help making them a better leader, but also by instilling in them some sense of competition as it is important to understand where one stands among the others in the same field.
- People should question the rule of authority as opposed to accepting them passively. 66
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 50
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 58
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 66
- People should question the rule of authority as opposed to accepting them passively. 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 251, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[2]
Message: Consider using 'do disagree that' or 'do agree that'.
Suggestion: do disagree that; do agree that
...gh I agree with the statement mostly, I do not agree with the fact that the sense of competition is not require...
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Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... his staff is happy with their work, or whether or not all of their customers are happy. All o...
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Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
... government or an industry or it can be an IT company developing softwares, the one f...
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Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
Suggestion: companies
...nment or an industry or it can be an IT company developing softwares, the one factor th...
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Line 9, column 175, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to make' or 'make'.
Suggestion: to make; make
...a sense of cooperation which would help making them a better leader, but also by insti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, really, so, still, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 457.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49671772429 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65094833315 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.411378555799 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 644.4 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.7413961617 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.4375 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5625 23.4991977007 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347841584592 0.243740707755 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118607798414 0.0831039109588 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145894400237 0.0758088955206 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248368585574 0.150359130593 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.166137422641 0.0667264976115 249% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.8420337079 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.1743820225 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 12.1639044944 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 100.480337079 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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