TOEFL essay: It has recently been announced that large shopping center may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Essay topics

There are many things that need to be considered while constructing mall in any part of the city. I strongly oppose constructing mall in my hometown. There are several reasons for this which I will explore in following essay.

First of all, shopping complexes and malls are usual hangout places for friends and families. Some people go to mall just for spending time even if they do not have anything to shop. As a result, these places will be crowded most of the time. It agitates the serenity in my place. In addition to this, more crowd will lead to increased traffic problems, air pollution and noise pollution. A shopping mall which opened two years ago in my hometown is a compelling example for this. It was very big and had almost all kinds of stores inside it. It attracted enormous amount of people around my city. They threw paper, plastic and other wastes in and around the mall. Surrounding area of mall was always inundated with vehicals. Their constant honking and continuous noise perturbed the residents around the mall.

Second, as I mentioned before shopping malls usually have variety of stores. Even though, it is true that one can get all the things under same roof, it will have negetive impacts on small local shopkeepers. These are the people who run their shops not because they want to become rich but to make thier living. If shopping mall is opened in their locality then it takes majority of market share and they will have to eventually close thier shop. I would like to take the example of same shopping mall that I mentioned earlier. Local shop keepers were taken aback by how shopping malls attracted their consumers. Many of small shop keepers moved out of town and others started searching for new job. Their family struggled alot until they found new job. It was even worse for some of them because they didn't know any other occupation and because of dependancy they could not migrate. For this reason I oppose opening shopping mall in my residency.

Finally, it is true that shopping malls provide job opportunities and make the shopping easier, we cannot undermine the negetive impacts that it will have on people. Also, items in big shopoping malls are way more costlier compared to that of small shops. In addition to this, shopping in malls will tempt an individual to buy unnecessary things. As a result one will end up spending more money. Small shops on the other hand, restricts the coice of items and wouldn't encourage us to buy unnecessary items.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that opening a shopping mall in my locality is not a good idea. This is because it will create traffic problems, increases air and noise pollution and small shop keepers will have to find an alternative for leading their lives.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
There are many things that need to be consider...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ven worse for some of them because they didnt know any other occupation and because o...
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Line 7, column 210, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'costlier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: costlier
...o, items in big shopoping malls are way more costlier compared to that of small shops. In add...
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Line 7, column 348, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n individual to buy unnecessary things. As a result one will end up spending more ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... hand, restricts the coice of items and wouldnt encourage us to buy unnecessary items. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, so, then, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2291.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78288100209 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42634176965 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498956158664 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2283390069 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.9032258065 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4516129032 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.51612903226 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0867752428831 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0293567781446 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0313788824515 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0615211586115 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165623463169 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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