Many people think that having more money will make them happier. How important is money to happiness?
Making more money has become more important to people rather than it used to be once. It is associated with the common belief that to live more happily you need to be wealthier. In this essay, I will discuss about the role of money in people’s lives and the reasons causing them to be so reliant on monetary issues to feel happy. As well, I will try to draw some conclusions.
There are some key factors resulting people in giving too much importance to money over other aspects of lives. Needless to say, the more money they have the more achievable their goals will be. If they had so much money to have a lavish lifestyle, they could buy everything they would like to, from big houses to luxury cars. Rich people could keep up with the latest fashions if they were keen on new trends. Last but not least, they have the chance of being surrounded by a substantial number of friends, which in-turn makes their emotional demands be fulfilled.
Despite the fact that money is the key to afford living expenses, hardly could it be the only way to feel happy. Firstly, making money to excess would not guarantee happiness in families. Kim Kardashian, for instance, was talking about her fears once. ‘I cannot trust people anymore because many of my friends have betrayed my trust up to now’, she said. Secondly, happiness is not a feeling that you find outside yourself. You can enjoy every minute of your life in a cabin watching the beautiful nature around you while a rich person might never camp in the nature instead of staying in luxury hotels. Finally and more importantly, though, it is the quality of relationships among family members that would create a happy and convivial atmosphere in which they live. Many of less affluent families have been seen to live with lower stress levels to their close relationships with each other.
In conclusion, although having money is essential to make a living, it is desirable up to a certain point. Furthermore, happiness is a sense more dependent on people’s characteristics and families. My view is that to live happily you need to be as wealthy as you can afford your basic demands, enjoy your life and be nice to your loved ones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: to live
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Suggestion:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pendent on people's characteristics and families. My view is that to live ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74545454545 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55404857209 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566233766234 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8148014095 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.35 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326919730558 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103232462536 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0880633231244 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206943019133 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503000376719 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.