Some people think placing advertisements in school is a great resource for
public schools that need additional funding, but others think it exploits
children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors. What
is your opinion?
These days, it has became a growing trend to see corporate sponsors placing
advertisements in school is a great resource for public schools that need
additional funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a
captive audience for corporate sponsors. As such, there are both merits and
demerists to this trend, although I am of the opinion of the latter outdo the
former.
There are a myriad of arguments in favour of my stance. The most conspicuous
one is that placing advertisements in school do not create good education
environment for students. Not only can advertisements aim on their own
benefits by trying to have more student customers, but they can not also give
good lessons for students because information deliver by advertisements may
not concern to lessons of student in many cases. Needless to say, all these
drawbacks have a far-reaching impact on education environment.
Another pivotal aspect of placing advertisements in school is that public school
are budgeted by government. The primary one stem from the fact that
government has to supply enought finance for public schools to run on their
activities. Last but not least, coporate sponsors may lobby to have the right of
placing advertisements in school, and this will lead to corruption in the
authorities. Hence, it is apparent why many are against placing advertisements
in public schools.
In view of the arguments outline above, one can conclude that the drawbacks
of placing advertisement in public schools are to dire to ignore.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
These days, it has became a growing trend to see corporate sponso...
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Line 8, column 13, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
Suggestion: myriads
...atter outdo the former. There are a myriad of arguments in favour of my stance. Th...
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Line 25, column 48, Rule ID: TO_TOO[5]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...ing advertisement in public schools are to dire to ignore.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, may, so, as to, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 8.36945812808 60% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 5.94088669951 84% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 20.9802955665 86% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 31.9359605911 125% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.75862068966 191% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1325.0 1207.87684729 110% => OK
No of words: 250.0 242.827586207 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3 5.00649968141 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 3.92707691288 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02131362159 2.71678728327 111% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 139.433497537 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556 0.580463131201 96% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 379.143842365 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.931034482759 322% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.6458434497 50.4703680194 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.454545455 104.977214359 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7272727273 20.9669160288 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 7.25397266985 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.12807881773 484% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 6.9802955665 43% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352672696278 0.242375264174 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120992400344 0.0925447433944 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150238645388 0.071462118173 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101398996228 0.151781067708 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110194928271 0.0609392437508 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 12.6369458128 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.1260098522 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.9458128079 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 11.5310837438 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.32886699507 103% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 55.0591133005 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.