Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that most of advertisements company using several strategies and methods to attract people to buy products. Most of people believes that the methods that used by these companies is not mainly based on ethics. Even some of them believe that these companies are overlie, because there is a high difference between their claims and reality. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that the advertisements companies are mainly adhere to ethics responsibilities. They say that if very small group of them sometime made mistake, it does not means that its idea is true about all of them. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
First and foremost, we can see a lot of example of untruth of advertisements in the daily life. for example we see that most of television advertisements about junk foods shows that these products have not create any problem for people health. They claim that because they used some especial oil to fire potato it led to these food become free from bad effect for healthy. However, all of nutrition scientists have strongly opposite view and believe that there is not any convincing evidence for this claim. They say that low trans oils cannot remove all of harmful effects of these kind of foods for people healthy.
On another significant fact that should be taken into the consideration is that advertisements shows products more beautiful and attractive than they really are. all us have experience with this happens that the products pictures in the internet shops is remarkably different with the products that we receive at home. advertisements using some graphic design methods to make their products more attractive than they really are.
Finally, yet importantly, advertisements used some psychological strategies to attract consumers. for instance, some known companies selling their products with unreasonable higher price than less known companies. because in this shape people believe that their products have higher qualification than others. But there is not a real difference between performance of these two brand.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that most of advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. because they abused from different brunch of science and knowledge to ensuring people to buy products.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 40, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the advertisements') or simply say ''most advertisements''.
Suggestion: most of the advertisements; most advertisements
Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that most of advertisements company using several strategies and me...
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Line 1, column 143, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the people') or simply say ''Most people''.
Suggestion: Most of the people; Most people
...hods to attract people to buy products. Most of people believes that the methods that used by ...
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Line 1, column 295, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'overlain'.
Suggestion: overlain
...f them believe that these companies are overlie, because there is a high difference bet...
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Line 1, column 484, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'adhered'.
Suggestion: adhered
...the advertisements companies are mainly adhere to ethics responsibilities. They say th...
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Line 1, column 596, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'mean'
Suggestion: mean
...them sometime made mistake, it does not means that its idea is true about all of them...
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Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...th of advertisements in the daily life. for example we see that most of television ...
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Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'created'.
Suggestion: created
...oods shows that these products have not create any problem for people health. They cla...
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Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this food' or 'these foods'?
Suggestion: this food; these foods
...e especial oil to fire potato it led to these food become free from bad effect for healthy...
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Line 3, column 578, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...cannot remove all of harmful effects of these kind of foods for people healthy. On ano...
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Line 5, column 163, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: All
...ul and attractive than they really are. all us have experience with this happens th...
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Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Advertisements
...h the products that we receive at home. advertisements using some graphic design methods to ma...
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Line 7, column 99, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...ogical strategies to attract consumers. for instance, some known companies selling ...
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Line 7, column 215, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...higher price than less known companies. because in this shape people believe that their...
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Line 7, column 215, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...higher price than less known companies. because in this shape people believe that their...
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Line 9, column 67, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the advertisements') or simply say ''most advertisements''.
Suggestion: most of the advertisements; most advertisements
...at mentioned above, I am convinced that most of advertisements make products seem much better than the...
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Line 9, column 143, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
... seem much better than they really are. because they abused from different brunch of sc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, really, so, still, even so, for example, for instance, kind of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2063.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23604060914 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80894300182 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494923857868 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.843981702 48.9658058833 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.15 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429203452377 0.236089414692 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143347220194 0.076458572812 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.203846620062 0.0737576698707 276% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280984542926 0.150856017488 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.158770387396 0.0645574589148 246% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.