With the advent of modern technology, our life has changed dramatically from past few decades. It is a controversial question whether in today's world youngsters should more systematic or not. In my opinion, it is very important to be organized in twenty-first century. I feel this way for two salient reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, with the increase in population, unemployment rate and fierce competition has increased rapidly. In such scenario, youths should plan their career very carefully, because the choices they will make today, definitely, render the outcome in the future days. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in the university, I wanted to be research scholar and dilemma was how to start and where to start and finally I seek advice from my professor. He suggests me to review research article and build up strong foundation. Later on, he noticed my performance had increased and he offered me to do volunteer work one of his research project. It was the milestone in my career and I accepted. This idea was working remarkably for me and now, I am working as a research scholar in the prestigious university. So, planning plays a booster factor in your career. On the other hand, many of my friends still struggling to get residency in the medical school because of lack of good strategy, experience and ideas.
Secondly, with the advancement in the technology, companies like to hire the employee with professional abilities, because they want their work place should be erroneous free and productive. Productivity of any company dependent upon the ability of the workers by including their work efficiency and how well organised they are. For instance, in these days, business schools prepare the students in a way so that they can future challenges at the work place. They make them organised and make them understand different strategies to become good businessman and also teach them do not rely only on one scheme, always include back-up plan in case of error. However, gone are days, when people believe in good fortune instead of careful planning and market survey.
In the last, I strongly believe that to survive in this materialistic world, youth needs to do good planning in order to achieve dream careers and well organised to bolster the work opportunities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, for instance, i feel, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03816793893 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87526852622 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587786259542 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4983516185 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.65 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120472219463 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.033456278978 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0267753963148 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0733402916146 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0218083609951 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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