Not like the past centuries any more, a large range of commodities and products spring out at an enormous speed in 21st century with the development of globalization and technology. Subsequently, a variety of advertisements break into people' sights on TV, computer internet and video programs, which remove the traditionally spreading barrier for them. So a question is just raised by some experts and consumers: Do most of the advertisements tell the truth of the product or they just deceive people deliberately in order to seem better and sell more? As for me, I strongly agree that most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. My reasons are elaborated below in these paragraphs.
First, most companies create their advertisement of the product so attractive and good-looking on purpose as to make more profits. But their product is bad in shape or qualities. To begin with, at the first glimpse of product of poor quality in the real world, some consumers may not buy it owing to the fact that they are not attracted by the product. In the second place, manufactures are eager to reverse the trend and then dedicate extra money on the advertisement to give a vivid impression on consumers. More importantly, as a study conducted by researchers in the university of Chicago suggests, after seeing the nice advertisement, the vast majority of people will remember what it says and next time buy the product with ignoring of the drawbacks. As a result, there are always some consumers bewildered by this exaggeration. They buy the product eventually and company can sell more products.
Second, through proliferating on the media, products in advertisements may change their outlooks, namely, the process of recording could leave an misunderstanding impression of good-looking. This can be better illustrated in a nationally-famous cooking company, Noodle Time. It is admitted that noodles cooked there are palatable and delicious. Nevertheless, they do not look fine to any ordinary people. Vegetables mixed with jelly fish and other spice look dark and dampen and meat spilled with other ingredients seem not so eatable. The advertisement on TV, on the other hand, is a main driving force behind its popularity. Noodles are all decorated with the method of recording enabling them to become more bright and colorful. Additionally, special camera angles contribute to their great and gorgeous shapes, which make people want to step into the restaurant and start to eat. Without these strategies to make them look better, though being delicious, few people will pay the bill. Thus, by spreading on the media like TV, products indeed look much better.
Granted, companies with realistic advertisements of their products still exist so that they can give consumers confident expectations on their products, which is also of great importance in this world. However, it is the social media that has taken a lot of people' time. Inevitably, in this way, nicer advertisements could get access to their eyes effortlessly. And it is a unchangeable truth that everyone loves something beautiful. So consumers are prone to buy products that look more fantastic in advertisements instead of products with practical outfit in advertisements. Then, most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Taking into account all my points, I may safely draw the conclusion that most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to give your opinion. 32
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 153, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: bad
...make more profits. But their product is bad in shape or qualities. To begin with, at the fir...
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Line 5, column 144, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...y, the process of recording could leave an misunderstanding impression of good-loo...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., few people will pay the bill. Thus, by spreading on the media like TV, products...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...s to their eyes effortlessly. And it is a unchangeable truth that everyone loves ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, really, second, so, still, then, thus, as for, as to, as a result, to begin with, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2939.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 560.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24821428571 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0974803577 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5125 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 900.0 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4837781404 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.344827586 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3103448276 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06896551724 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.477582552045 0.236089414692 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136683800595 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.223461817342 0.0737576698707 303% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.352786530608 0.150856017488 234% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.161864261093 0.0645574589148 251% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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