The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women on different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women on different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Thu Mo on Mon, 10/29/2018 - 02:02

The bar chart compares the different age groups between male and female in terms of physical activity in Australia in 2010.

It is clear that the percentage of women activity was higher than men when they are getting aged with the exception for the young female. There are similar the percentage of activity between 2 sexes when they are becoming elderly.

The men accounted for 52% of activity, 5% higher than the figure for women in 15 to 24-year-old group. The male of two groups which 25 to 34 and people aged 45 to 54 is lower than the figure for female, at 8%.

More women enjoy physical activity than men, with 46.7% and 47.1% respectively in 65 and over years old group. 43.1% of women activity in 45 to 54 years old, 3 % higher than the figure for men, while the figure for men activity between 2 groups was similar.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he figure for women in 15 to 24-year-old group. The male of two groups which 25 t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... activity than men, with 46.7% and 47.1% respectively in 65 and over years old gr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 685.0 965.302439024 71% => OK
No of words: 151.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53642384106 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.50545371207 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29829478821 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 80.0 106.607317073 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529801324503 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 205.2 283.868780488 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 17.947770028 43.030603864 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.8571428571 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.28571428571 5.23603664747 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21665426201 0.215688989381 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122936672901 0.103423049105 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665225998666 0.0843802449381 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159987860415 0.15604864568 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675740702759 0.0819641961636 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.2329268293 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 11.4140731707 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.66 8.06136585366 83% => OK
difficult_words: 19.0 40.7170731707 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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