TPO 22
Most teachers are very knowledgeable and respected by the students. However, it doesn’t mean that they should show their social or political views to their students in the classroom. To me, I am afraid I have to disagree with the statement.
First, students are naive and lacking social experiences. Some of them are still not qualified to tell the differences between opinion and fact. If the teachers show their political viewpoints during the class, these young children can be easily affected, because they consider everything the teacher said is right and objective without a second thought. For instance, my brother is a junior student. One day he came home and told me to throw all the foreign products from home because he heard a story from his teacher at the school. The story his teacher told him that, after a nuclear leak accident happened in Japan, the Japanese still sell goods from those polluted areas. The teacher said these businessmen are unethical. After hearing this opinion, my brother started to consider all foreigners and import products are wrong, and we should not use them anymore. However, this is bias, and my brother can’t tell if that right or not. Thus, I think teachers opinions can easily manipulate young students thoughts. To avoid it, Teachers should not express their personal political views too much.
Second, teachers should pay more attention to teaching rather than forcing students to hear these kinds of viewpoints. To discuss a social or political event and express opinions usually take much time, as this process requires a lot of background information. If the teacher spends too much time on these trivial things, the time for students to learn skills and knowledge will be reduced. For example, most college students have a heavy load on many subjects, and if their class professors keep spending the time to tell their political views, class schedules will be delayed. Even worse, students may fail the exam.
Although discussing opinions have many benefits for the students, but accounting the fact that most students expect more objective knowledge rather than personal views, I think the teachers should not express their social or political views to students in the classroom.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, i think, i am afraid
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15846994536 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56511835667 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532786885246 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8836989327 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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