Nowadays, we can not deny that people' lives in big cities are threaten by a lot of problems. In addition, some of these have been creating a huge rage of danger for human. Some people claim that encouraging residents move to smaller areas is the good idea to solve these problems. In my opinion, I argue that this measure is not the best and the only way that the governments can conduct to improve citizens' lives.
Today, due to the development of many large cities, the mount of social problems is also increasing. For example, all the people who are living in the industrial cities nowadays are facing with air pollution. In some extent, almost of them do not realize this danger, however, the growth in the number of diseases is the best evidence which demonstrate clearly the seriousness of this problem. In addition, living with lots of society's vices is also the one of difficulties that residents in the big cities have to face with.
However, there are also a lot of things that the governments can do to help the people. Generally, I really support the idea that people who are living in crowed cities should migrate to smaller regional towns because in these areas people can live in peaceful environment without any smoke from factories. Furthermore, I also suggest that governments should create some solutions to limit the pollutants coming from industries in big cities. The demand of security of citizens should be responded by rebuild a stronger law which can deterred criminals in sinning.
In conclusion, I admit that there are a lot of social problems which is threatening humans' lives in big cities. However, encouraging people move to regional places is not the only way governments can do to recuse people from danger.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'threatened'.
Suggestion: threatened
...eny that people lives in big cities are threaten by a lot of problems. In addition, some...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, really, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1453.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87583892617 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64888412179 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493288590604 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 459.0 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3537747528 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.785714286 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351294912689 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112930892186 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815160720931 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217428764016 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0277864211336 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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