In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in

The reading and the lecture are about the electronic medical record which may replace the paper record that contains essential information about patients. The author in the reading believes that electronic medical record may bring about some advantages not only for doctors but also for medical research. However, the lecturer casts doubt on claims made by the author. She thinks that this proposal might not be as successful as it is though.
First, the author states that this adoption will have advantages in terms of money. He argues that unlike the paper record, the use of electronic devices for recording this information can reduce the costs of storing and transferring medical records. This idea is challenged by the lecturer who posits that this proposal is unlikely to save money because, in spite of the fact that doctors adopt this idea, they may continue using paper as an emergency base of information.
Second, the article claims that the prevention of mistakes may be another benefit of using electronic devices for storing information about patients. The author is of the idea that illegible handwriting, inaccurately transcription of data are the causes of this common errors. Nonetheless, the lecturer refutes this hypothesis by explaining that the adoption of this method does not eliminate those errors because doctors may continue using paper for receipt and poor hand goes on being misinterpreted.
Finally, the author mentions that electronic medical records can be advantageous for gathering a large amount of data from patient records. It will make simpler to have access to this information anywhere. The lecturer, on the other hand, puts forth the idea that there will be some impediments that may block the access to this data. Furthermore, she points out that currently there are laws which provide patient to keep their records under privacy if they wish it. Doctor, in these cases, will have to get some special permissions for making this data accessible.

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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, second, so, in spite of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 22.412803532 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1373.03311258 122% => OK
No of words: 321.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21495327103 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66826749051 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517133956386 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 419.366225166 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5467014556 49.2860985944 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.6 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 7.06452816374 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280043745854 0.272083759551 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103158152857 0.0996497079465 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111517359688 0.0662205650399 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186726905822 0.162205337803 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0793064438021 0.0443174109184 179% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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