Television has been one of the most important advances in technology. However, there are different opinions about its effects. Some people consider that television has brought about positive effects on human’s behavior while others believe that it presents negative aspects. I personally believe that the advantages of television overweight those negative consequences. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the main purpose of the creation of the television has been to provide people with a different type of entertainment. In fact, it has been a method that most of the people currently use for relaxing after extensive hours of working or studying. By doing this activity, many people have improved their performance not only in their jobs but at in their academic duties. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in high school, sometimes I had problems in focusing in class and consequently, my performance was questioned by some professors. Nevertheless, after days and even weeks trying to organize better my activities during the day, I finally found the best schedule for my time. In spite of having a lot of work per day, I spent little of my free time relaxing; and one of the activities that I used to do was watching movies or series on TV. Having incorporated this activity in my schedule, I could concentrate better in class and my grades improved as well. Furthermore, according to my psychology professor, it was because of the fact that my stress disappeared.
Secondly, another benefit that people may obtain by using television as a tool of entertainment is imagination. According to several studies in psychology, television helps exclusively children to improve their creativity. Since they can relate information acquired by class to information from the television, they can create a story and also organize information. For instance, my nephew, who is 9 years old, two years ago supposedly did not present abilities for creating. However, this reality changed when he started to watch movies. Because he acquired new information from the stories on TV, he replied the scenes from the movie and also performed new actions which according to his doctor was a characteristic of people who have great skills to create. In other words, not only television by itself but also the content in it, play an important role in the development of some abilities that are essential for children.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that television has come for improving our lives because it does not only improve our performance in our activities but also provide us with tools for enhancing our ability of creation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1058, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...ding to my psychology professor, it was because of the fact that my stress disappeared. Secondly, anot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, in other words, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2275.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10089686099 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98811298315 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540358744395 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7771571413 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.409090909 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2727272727 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.45454545455 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13269030234 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0398782212846 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394410840177 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0829336826282 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052196346436 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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