At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

it is true that the population composition plays an important role in constructing the policy to develop country. In some countries, the percentage of the young is considerably higher than that of the old, this may cause some challenge in national management. From my point of view, I would argue that younger population is a huge benefit of these countries.

Firstly, it is undeniable that the country having large number of young adults owns an abundant source of employees, thus this is a giant economic resource. Although plenty of workers could bring a serious stress to the government in providing enough job opportunities, it is a true advantageous point to develop national economy in global integration time through international cooperation, join venture or employee export. For example, in Vietnam, an abundance of the young attracted a lot of big economic groups such as Samsung, Neon, Nokia... to invest and cooperate, that distributed a significant tax amount to public money. Besides, young population represents high capacity of exchange, innovation and flexibility. that is valuable support for dynamic improvement of countries in the future, especially in the world of rapid changed technology.

Secondly, majority of young adults could offer the government to reduce the payment for the health-care services and facilities of old people. In fact, the money which government need to spend for pension and nursing home is a serious question in old populated countries such as Sweden, Canada and Japan. Furthermore, low amount of young people leads to anxious issue about stability of country in the future. this is because nowadays people follow a tendency of having only one child, the effort to increase national population becomes more difficult than to limit birth rate.

In conclusion, at the present time, some countries have higher proportion of young adults than old people, this brings a lot of difficulties in national management of both economy and society. However, from these above reasons, I believe that advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38181818182 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98650161882 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581818181818 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6970701711 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.4 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244285081962 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709373720121 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562504973526 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148521194335 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633913014882 0.056905535591 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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