At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, the proportion of young adults is higher than older people in some countries. while I accept that this type of population structure has some negative effects on the development of the countries, I believe that there are more positive influences than negative influences.
On the one hand, a large number of young adults can be harmful to the environment. For example, young people are more likely to buy a car for their work and daily life, then more pollution would be produced by them. From the economic perspective, the higher percentage of young adults could lead to the high price of real estate, make it harder to buy a property and influence on people's wellbeing. Moreover, the high proportion of young adults will lead to a high fertility rate, then it would be much more difficult for children to get the high quality of educational resources and reduce their wellbeing.
However, I would argue that these drawbacks are outweighed by the benefits. Firstly, more young people can provide enough resource for the labor market and boost the economy of this country. Secondly, more middle-aged people can promote consumption. For example, it can improve the development of the wedding industry. Finally, the large proportion of young adult than elderly people can cut the burden of the social welfare system, make it easier for the governments to pay for the pension.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the advantages of the large number of young adults are more significant than the possible drawbacks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 89, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...er than older people in some countries. while I accept that this type of population s...
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Line 3, column 18, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...gative influences. On the one hand, a large number of young adults can be harmful to the envi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1278.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05138339921 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72377618559 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 176.041082164 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517786561265 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 397.8 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5263270209 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.5 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0833333333 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.58333333333 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128407250523 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578246647602 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527637346444 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0999419666415 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042878037134 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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