The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Vikuns on Fri, 01/18/2019 - 09:12

The bar chart provides information about the proportions of Australian's people who systematically exercise in both genders by age groups in the year 2010.

Overall, it is clear that regularly have had physical activity around half of Australian's people in the different ages of groups. it had seen that women tend to have exercised more than men in the almost entire groups, just group of the males under 25 years overstepped the females.

Looking at the diagram, we can see that the lowest part of males attended the regular exercises, 39.5%, in the group between 35 and 45 years. While the most significant number of men, 52.8%, had physical activity until 25 years. In 2010, the proportion of men who did the sport experienced a downward trend until 39.5%, in the older groups increased slightly to 46.7%.

In comparison to males, the females groups between 35 to 65 years have shown the most significant contribution to their health by doing exercises and have reached above 50% in these groups. Only one group that is older than 65 years of Australian's people in both genders: females and males, received the same number of percentages such as 47.1 and 46.7 respectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...people in the different ages of groups. it had seen that women tend to have exerci...
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Line 5, column 279, Rule ID: DID_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean 'experience'?
Suggestion: experience
...the proportion of men who did the sport experienced a downward trend until 39.5%, in the ol...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 991.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 199.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97989949749 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69560404261 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582914572864 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 283.5 283.868780488 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.1794019815 43.030603864 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.875 112.824112599 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.875 22.9334400587 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244192368287 0.215688989381 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109772043826 0.103423049105 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654483730425 0.0843802449381 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153675439741 0.15604864568 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580309539917 0.0819641961636 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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