Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The present and future generations are more and more exposed to the technologies that the global communication brings. We need to pay attention and learn how to take care of our children otherwise the social pressure and the irresponsible advertising will be the epicenter of epidemics social disease.
The amount of tech that surround the humanity is such that we left everything comes to eyes, hears and hands of unprepared people to receive that information. The human evolution take millions of years and the recent four hundred years are almost nothing in that timeline, however, the human environment have changed a lot in that last period and the human mind aren’t ready yet for a full and abrupt immersion into the tech world. It’s beyond question that if it is prejudicial to adults, imagine the effects that it would have in kids minds.
The quick evolution changed our relationships in any level or ages. We don’t raise the children like before we did, we don’t push the same responsibilities that we had in the time that we are kids, we charge much more and put the burden of their future in their shoulders sooner than before. The parents, the social media, government, all the social institutions need to, as quickly than globalization, learn how to manage and teach this new dynamics to the next generations. Unprepared minds abreast the instant and overwhelming tech, massive manipulations and stipulations allied to the pressure that this new era brings, this could be a totally mess.
All of that background is trying to explain that we are not ready for the problems that we are creating. The uncontrolled media gets in an environment that have all the hardware and software that they want to use as they wish a wild society and all of it faces a weak person, and among them are the children. Leaving our sons and daughters all alone in that new world is giving them and the world to a completely chaos in the future. Just for an example, we leave our kids watching in all the vehicles, the suggestions of the vendors of what they should eat, and they grow up eating badly, they become unhealthy and all the social system makes them feel bad about their body. That’s the recipe of many depression cases that we face.
We need to teach ourselves first, be the example and try to change our planet because we’re creating the worst case scenario, a sick society, raising our kids with an unhealthy body and abandoning their psychological. We are dragging down not just ourselves, but the entire world as an environment.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: AS_ADJ_AS[1]
Message: Comparison is written "as quickly 'as'".
Suggestion: as
...social institutions need to, as quickly than globalization, learn how to manage and ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 649, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('totally') instead an adjective, or a noun ('mess') instead of another adjective.
...that this new era brings, this could be a totally mess. All of that background is trying to ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 401, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('completely') instead an adjective, or a noun ('chaos') instead of another adjective.
...w world is giving them and the world to a completely chaos in the future. Just for an example, we ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2133.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85876993166 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76332610648 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533029612756 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.0057370475 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.3125 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4375 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.6875 5.45110844103 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.039310013788 0.236089414692 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0124894975265 0.076458572812 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0209557964295 0.0737576698707 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0272483068008 0.150856017488 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0208335054503 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.002688172 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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