Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects,
especially at the primary level.
Do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that the arts are just as valid as the other subjects, especially for primary
school children. This essay agrees with that statement and will first discuss how
some students flourish when studying music, art or drama and then talk about how
maths and science are not crucial at primary level.
Not everyone has a talent for mathematics, physics or languages and many students
only do their best work when they can be creative. In fact, many pupils simply cannot
focus on traditional subjects unless they are expressing themselves creatively
through painting, song or dance. Take Gillian Lynne for example, who at a young
age was told she had a learning difficulty, but in fact could not learn without moving
her body. Gillian, a typical kinesthetic learner, went on to become a world-famous
choreographer, but would have never have been a success without the
encouragement of her dance teacher.
Others would disagree with this view and say that art related subjects stop young
children from spending enough time on the more ‘serious’ subjects and passing
important exams. However, until children get to high school, it is more important for
them to have a good attitude towards education than passing tests. For instance, in
Finland, elementary school children do no tests at all and focus on all disciplines
equally. This allows children to choose the subjects they prefer and has been shown
to be one of the leading factors in them having the best education system in the
world.
In conclusion, painting, dance and acting should be given equal status in the primary
classroom because they allow artistic children to learn more effectively and it is
unwise to put pressure on children to pass maths and science exams at such a
young age.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 37, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...us choreographer, but would have never have been a success without the encourageme...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, then, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1512.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14285714286 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69412662904 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619047619048 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.7978211303 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.454545455 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7272727273 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27272727273 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.38176352705 502% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232233991296 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816620744384 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.091502393957 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0557878525593 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0750783874981 0.056905535591 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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